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Repost of an oldie for  the What Of ... A Pearl? Poetry Contest of Craig Cornish

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The moon was a pearl - a large white brilliant pearl of a moon precious like the one I adored as it shone down on us from the sky. The sky was a sea - a broad expanse of midnight blue as deep as the love we made deep in a night swimming with shimmering myriads of stars. And the stars were fish - beautiful shimmering star-fish as bright as the glow in his eyes - those eyes that gazed into mine deep into the night of the beautiful sky - that broad expanse of midnight blue - the sea into which we gazed so deeply in love as the moon met our gaze - the moon that shone down on me and my love most precious - Oh, night of the large, white brilliant moon - the pearl.

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Date: 5/27/2024 4:59:00 PM
Andrea, I love how you describe emotion on different planes and frames of reference. It adds something special to the emotion of love, which you describe. It's very cute indeed!!
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Date: 5/28/2024 1:16:00 PM
thanks, Duke. This is one of my personal favorites in free verse though I am sure it would not be regarded as so great by the contemporary free verse writers of today
Date: 5/24/2024 11:10:00 AM
Excellent poem with metaphors and imagery. Best wishes with the contest.
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Date: 5/23/2024 7:34:00 PM
Your writing had a powerful effect, and I greatly valued the perceptive viewpoints. The poem does an excellent job of expressing many metaphors, substantially improving the representation of feelings.
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Date: 5/23/2024 5:12:00 PM
Lovely metaphors, Andrea! Your imagery was delightful (stars shimmering starfish and white moon as a pearl). You've captured the beauty of a pure white moon. Best wishes with the contest, hugs, Sara
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Date: 5/23/2024 3:21:00 PM
Interesting set of sky metaphors you have created, masterful images of the night sky.
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