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The One Who Survived

Midway
Dauntless bomber
pockmarked sky ... fire rains up
craft spirals down. Mate trapped ... eject
alone

2/7/2016

Contest--The One Who Survived 

Sara Kendrick

Copyright © Steve Grammatico | Year Posted 2016

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Eve Roper Date: 2/13/2016 3:17:00 PM Steve, congratulations on your placement in survivor contest Login to Reply Steve Grammatico Date: 2/13/2016 3:21:00 PM Thanks, Eve. It was a tricky one. I liked a lot of the other entries more than my own, including yours.

Poet Destroyer A Date: 2/13/2016 6:34:00 AM Why thank you Steve, nice reply Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 2/12/2016 9:01:00 AM I don't know if this was you or someone in your family or someone you know but being the suvivor can bring its own set of promblems or trauma..Congrats on your placement..Sara Login to Reply Sara Kendrick Date: 2/13/2016 6:48:00 AM Steve, I thought that it sounded like a WWII movie..Yes, I have heard how that many who saw others die and they survived or suffered from severe grief and the guilt..Thanks for your entry..Sara Steve Grammatico Date: 2/13/2016 6:20:00 AM Sara, an interesting challenge. Thanks for running the contest. Actually, the poem was inspired by a book, The Conquering Tide, about the war in the Pacific between 1942-44. We lost many pilots and crew in various actions. I'm sure survivor guilt plagued some of the men who got out alive.

Joyce Johnson Date: 2/12/2016 12:22:00 AM Great story. congratulations. Love, Joyce Login to Reply Steve Grammatico Date: 2/13/2016 6:23:00 AM Thanks, Joyce. As I mention to Sara above, it was inspired by real events.

Poet Destroyer A Date: 2/11/2016 10:32:00 PM STEVE, Congratulations on your awesome win. XOX ~LINDA~ Login to Reply Steve Grammatico Date: 2/13/2016 6:25:00 AM Thanks, Linda. Always a pleasure to hear from you.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 2/11/2016 10:13:00 PM Very touchy.. was it you?? congrats on ur great win with this awesome write Steve. Login to Reply Steve Grammatico Date: 2/21/2016 4:12:00 AM Belated thanks, Dr. Sharma. I was pleasantly surprised by the placement.

Jan Allison Date: 2/11/2016 5:11:00 PM such vivid imagery in so few words congrats on your win Steve:-) hugs jan xx Login to Reply Steve Grammatico Date: 2/13/2016 6:27:00 AM Thanks, Jan. A compliment from you means a lot.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/11/2016 4:02:00 PM ahhh, this was you? I like this. Congrats for your win. Login to Reply Steve Grammatico Date: 2/13/2016 6:33:00 AM Thanks, Andrea. The inspiration was a book about the brave pilots and crews who were instrumental in winning the war against Japan.

Elaine George Date: 2/11/2016 12:38:00 PM Many congrats on your win, Steve, with this fine Cinquain. Elaine Login to Reply Steve Grammatico Date: 2/13/2016 6:37:00 AM Thanks, Elaine. Had never run into the cinquain form before.

Susan Gentry Date: 2/11/2016 12:36:00 PM Congratulations on your win! Well-written. Both of you my heroes. Thank you. Login to Reply Steve Grammatico Date: 2/14/2016 6:02:00 AM What a nice compliment. Thank you, Susan.

Lin Lane Date: 2/11/2016 10:26:00 AM I thought your Cinquain was one of the better ones, Steve. Well done. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 2/11/2016 12:08:00 PM What a high compliment for both of my poems, Steve. They're very much appreciated. Steve Grammatico Date: 2/11/2016 12:04:00 PM Thanks, Lin. in fact, I liked yours better than mine; it had, I don 't know, an immediacy mine didn't have. I noticed your first place win in the Home Sweet Home contest. That was an elegant piece of writing.

Janice Canerdy Date: 2/8/2016 1:02:00 PM A 7 for sure--so much conveyed in so few words. Janice Login to Reply Janice Canerdy Date: 2/10/2016 4:19:00 PM Not offbeat approach at all! It's common for war survivors to feel guilty over deaths of comrades. Janice Steve Grammatico Date: 2/10/2016 12:10:00 PM Thanks, Janice. Kind of an offbeat approach to the challenge. Not sure it'll fly.