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The One Who Survived

Midway Dauntless bomber pockmarked sky ... fire rains up craft spirals down. Mate trapped ... eject alone 2/7/2016 Contest--The One Who Survived Sara Kendrick

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Eve Roper

Date: 2/13/2016 3:17:00 PM

Steve, congratulations on your placement in survivor contest

Steve Grammatico
Date: 2/13/2016 3:21:00 PM

Thanks, Eve. It was a tricky one. I liked a lot of the other entries more than my own, including yours.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/13/2016 6:34:00 AM

Why thank you Steve, nice reply

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/12/2016 9:01:00 AM

I don't know if this was you or someone in your family or someone you know but being the suvivor can bring its own set of promblems or trauma..Congrats on your placement..Sara

Sara Kendrick
Date: 2/13/2016 6:48:00 AM

Steve, I thought that it sounded like a WWII movie..Yes, I have heard how that many who saw others die and they survived or suffered from severe grief and the guilt..Thanks for your entry..Sara

Steve Grammatico
Date: 2/13/2016 6:20:00 AM

Sara, an interesting challenge. Thanks for running the contest. Actually, the poem was inspired by a book, The Conquering Tide, about the war in the Pacific between 1942-44. We lost many pilots and crew in various actions. I'm sure survivor guilt plagued some of the men who got out alive.

Joyce Johnson

Date: 2/12/2016 12:22:00 AM

Great story. congratulations. Love, Joyce

Steve Grammatico
Date: 2/13/2016 6:23:00 AM

Thanks, Joyce. As I mention to Sara above, it was inspired by real events.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/11/2016 10:32:00 PM

STEVE, Congratulations on your awesome win. XOX ~LINDA~

Steve Grammatico
Date: 2/13/2016 6:25:00 AM

Thanks, Linda. Always a pleasure to hear from you.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 2/11/2016 10:13:00 PM

Very touchy.. was it you?? congrats on ur great win with this awesome write Steve.

Steve Grammatico
Date: 2/21/2016 4:12:00 AM

Belated thanks, Dr. Sharma. I was pleasantly surprised by the placement.

Jan Allison

Date: 2/11/2016 5:11:00 PM

such vivid imagery in so few words congrats on your win Steve:-) hugs jan xx

Steve Grammatico
Date: 2/13/2016 6:27:00 AM

Thanks, Jan. A compliment from you means a lot.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/11/2016 4:02:00 PM

ahhh, this was you? I like this. Congrats for your win.

Steve Grammatico
Date: 2/13/2016 6:33:00 AM

Thanks, Andrea. The inspiration was a book about the brave pilots and crews who were instrumental in winning the war against Japan.

Elaine George

Date: 2/11/2016 12:38:00 PM

Many congrats on your win, Steve, with this fine Cinquain. Elaine

Steve Grammatico
Date: 2/13/2016 6:37:00 AM

Thanks, Elaine. Had never run into the cinquain form before.

Susan Gentry

Date: 2/11/2016 12:36:00 PM

Congratulations on your win! Well-written. Both of you my heroes. Thank you.

Steve Grammatico
Date: 2/14/2016 6:02:00 AM

What a nice compliment. Thank you, Susan.

Lin Lane

Date: 2/11/2016 10:26:00 AM

I thought your Cinquain was one of the better ones, Steve. Well done.

Lin Lane
Date: 2/11/2016 12:08:00 PM

What a high compliment for both of my poems, Steve. They're very much appreciated.

Steve Grammatico
Date: 2/11/2016 12:04:00 PM

Thanks, Lin. in fact, I liked yours better than mine; it had, I don 't know, an immediacy mine didn't have. I noticed your first place win in the Home Sweet Home contest. That was an elegant piece of writing.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 2/8/2016 1:02:00 PM

A 7 for sure--so much conveyed in so few words. Janice

Janice Canerdy
Date: 2/10/2016 4:19:00 PM

Not offbeat approach at all! It's common for war survivors to feel guilty over deaths of comrades. Janice

Steve Grammatico
Date: 2/10/2016 12:10:00 PM

Thanks, Janice. Kind of an offbeat approach to the challenge. Not sure it'll fly.