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The One Who Survived

Midway
Dauntless bomber
pockmarked sky ... fire rains up
craft spirals down. Mate trapped ... eject
alone

2/7/2016

Contest--The One Who Survived 

Sara Kendrick

warcinquain

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Eve Roper

February 13, 2016 at 3:17 PM

Steve, congratulations on your placement in survivor contest

Steve Grammatico

February 13, 2016 at 3:21 PM

Thanks, Eve. It was a tricky one. I liked a lot of the other entries more than my own, including yours.

Poet Destroyer A

February 13, 2016 at 6:34 AM

Why thank you Steve, nice reply

Sara Kendrick

February 12, 2016 at 9:01 AM

I don't know if this was you or someone in your family or someone you know but being the suvivor can bring its own set of promblems or trauma..Congrats on your placement..Sara

Sara Kendrick

February 13, 2016 at 6:48 AM

Steve, I thought that it sounded like a WWII movie..Yes, I have heard how that many who saw others die and they survived or suffered from severe grief and the guilt..Thanks for your entry..Sara

Steve Grammatico

February 13, 2016 at 6:20 AM

Sara, an interesting challenge. Thanks for running the contest. Actually, the poem was inspired by a book, The Conquering Tide, about the war in the Pacific between 1942-44. We lost many pilots and crew in various actions. I'm sure survivor guilt plagued some of the men who got out alive.

Joyce Johnson

February 12, 2016 at 12:22 AM

Great story. congratulations. Love, Joyce

Steve Grammatico

February 13, 2016 at 6:23 AM

Thanks, Joyce. As I mention to Sara above, it was inspired by real events.

Poet Destroyer A

February 11, 2016 at 10:32 PM

STEVE, Congratulations on your awesome win. XOX ~LINDA~

Steve Grammatico

February 13, 2016 at 6:25 AM

Thanks, Linda. Always a pleasure to hear from you.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

February 11, 2016 at 10:13 PM

Very touchy.. was it you?? congrats on ur great win with this awesome write Steve.

Steve Grammatico

February 21, 2016 at 4:12 AM

Belated thanks, Dr. Sharma. I was pleasantly surprised by the placement.

Jan Allison

February 11, 2016 at 5:11 PM

such vivid imagery in so few words congrats on your win Steve:-) hugs jan xx

Steve Grammatico

February 13, 2016 at 6:27 AM

Thanks, Jan. A compliment from you means a lot.

Andrea Dietrich

February 11, 2016 at 4:02 PM

ahhh, this was you? I like this. Congrats for your win.

Steve Grammatico

February 13, 2016 at 6:33 AM

Thanks, Andrea. The inspiration was a book about the brave pilots and crews who were instrumental in winning the war against Japan.

Elaine George

February 11, 2016 at 12:38 PM

Many congrats on your win, Steve, with this fine Cinquain. Elaine

Steve Grammatico

February 13, 2016 at 6:37 AM

Thanks, Elaine. Had never run into the cinquain form before.

Susan Gentry

February 11, 2016 at 12:36 PM

Congratulations on your win! Well-written. Both of you my heroes. Thank you.

Steve Grammatico

February 14, 2016 at 6:02 AM

What a nice compliment. Thank you, Susan.

Lin Lane

February 11, 2016 at 10:26 AM

I thought your Cinquain was one of the better ones, Steve. Well done.

Lin Lane

February 11, 2016 at 12:08 PM

What a high compliment for both of my poems, Steve. They're very much appreciated.

Steve Grammatico

February 11, 2016 at 12:04 PM

Thanks, Lin. in fact, I liked yours better than mine; it had, I don 't know, an immediacy mine didn't have. I noticed your first place win in the Home Sweet Home contest. That was an elegant piece of writing.