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The Oldest Crime

Daggled and bloodied, the young man lay upon the ground where he’d been left.. .left by vile men who, spurred by senseless hate and ravenous for a taste of violence, had lured him with false fellowship and brought him to this secluded spot by veil of darkened day. At first, they bound his arms, rendering him defenseless to what was to ensue. After dragging him a small way from the back seat of their van, they proceeded to pummel his stomach and his face, breaking his nose almost instantly. When he stumbled to the ground, he received the heels of their boots as they kicked at his extremities and then again, he received their cruel blows to his stomach and face. When certain they had done enough damage so he would not last a night in the cold, they spat on him and drove away. As his attackers sat far away in a bar, drunk and boasting how they’d “done the world a favor,” he’d already passed the stage of vomiting and gasping for his breath. And though his brain was writhing with awful pain, with knowledge of his sure obliteration, his chilled and broken body stayed inert. Reposed as if inside the womb, he felt the ache receding, and before night’s shadows passed into the dawn, his blood had stanched. Now as flesh turns into carrion lying undiscovered in the dust, his spirit… never quashed. . .cries out for justice.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 4/5/2011 8:04:00 AM
Awesome write here, Andrea - not surprised to see you won the contest. I wrote up a couple of Plymouth murders for True Crime magazine once and had nightmares! Yes, I called my poem 30th Feb as it'll never happen...
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Date: 2/26/2011 12:14:00 PM
This time I am angry with these people-----kash
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Date: 2/24/2011 10:11:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved 1st place win Andrea in Debbie Guzzi's contest "Anything But Rhyme". Love, Carol
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Date: 2/20/2011 11:04:00 PM
Andrea, congratulations on winning in the contest with this fine entry. A little more to read this time, but worth it.
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Date: 2/19/2011 10:40:00 AM
A wonderful write; could be race, sex, any alternative of the norm. Nebulous in a wonderful way; it captures the essence of hate for the perpetrators and the empathy for the victim. Thank you; you make all readers better with this poem.
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Date: 2/18/2011 10:12:00 AM
I love this poem of you ,but hate those people Andrea!Congrats on your 1st place win in the contest of Debbie---kash
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Date: 2/18/2011 9:59:00 AM
Just got to this one, Andra. What a story!!!! Many congrat's. Lainie
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Date: 2/18/2011 9:58:00 AM
Just got to this one, Andra. What a story!!!! Many congrat's. Lainie
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Date: 2/18/2011 7:49:00 AM
And most surely justice there will be. Hey! Nobody gets away with nada. Great write. Made me fighting mad. Love, Dave
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Date: 2/17/2011 8:33:00 AM
congratulations on snaffling first place with this first class prose poem Andrea!
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Date: 2/17/2011 4:13:00 AM
Such an amazing short story it is!!! I am pleased that you won this contest! You truly deserve it and your gift is wonderful! Love, Sami
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Date: 2/16/2011 10:02:00 PM
Coming back here to congratulate you on this awesome write-- it is no surprise that it got first :) way to go for you, sweetie :) hugs to you :)
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Date: 2/16/2011 9:15:00 PM
what an action-filled story, andrea!! CHEERS for the top win ;) huggs, nette
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Date: 2/16/2011 4:30:00 PM
Congratulations on the first place win in the contest, Andrea
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Date: 2/16/2011 3:56:00 PM
Congratulations on your no. 1 with this intense poem. Love, Joyce
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Date: 2/16/2011 3:47:00 PM
Hey, this is getting old......Congrats on your win.........George
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Date: 2/16/2011 2:01:00 PM
This is reminiscent of the 1998 death of Matthew Sheppard. It was a tragic, shocking and accursed event. This piece is deserving because it reminds us of the value of human life. RAY
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Date: 2/16/2011 1:33:00 PM
very graphic and horrible...well written...... and congratulations on your win....well done, Andrea!.......Syd
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Date: 2/16/2011 1:24:00 PM
Wow....like the opening page of a suspense novel.....excellent prose/story of hate and potential revenge!! Well done Andrea...congratulations on your victory!!
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Date: 2/16/2011 12:54:00 PM
Look at you go gal! I had NO clue you could do this! wowser! Congrad's avery hard topic to write on, get the point across and be able to have people listen! #1, A #1 Light & Love
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Date: 2/16/2011 8:43:00 AM
now adays, violent crime is one of the maladies afflicting modern society. great work here. melody maker.
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Date: 2/16/2011 6:50:00 AM
An unsolved murder or gang warfare or drugs would be my guess. It does cry out for justice. I bet Frank did not mind the 20 girls who took him out Ha ha ha. On the serious side a very strong write on brutality and death. love phyl
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Date: 2/15/2011 10:26:00 PM
You got me gripped with this very strong write Andrea-- quite a different turn for you but I also love it when you write this way :)-- dark yet you bring reality here as well-- I hope this places high ;) hugs to you :) going in 5 mins :) hahaha
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Date: 2/15/2011 8:06:00 PM
Pretty strong stuff, for a sweetheart like you. Is it for a contest? Thanks for your comments on my Love Alliteration/limerick.. No I was just trying to score more points. Love, Joyce
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Date: 2/15/2011 5:11:00 PM
This is a very good entry into the contest of Debbie.Enjoyed---kashinath
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