Vijay Pandit Poet Rhyme

The Old Rusty Gate

Withered memories invigorate, rekindling rhythm of heart,
Grabbing hold of me to retrieve elation of forgotten past
Throbbing in enchantment, treasured memoirs now impart,
Where decaying house stands, bearing grief seasons cast.

Up the hill I trek, gazing pastures glistening in dawning day
As glint of dawn slowly scintillates horizon shrouded gray
Amid mooing calls of cows, where mango trees gently sway,
Waltzing echoes of yore, clucking~ clattering hens convey.

How regally it welcomes me, my cherished childhood place
Beckoning as it peeks through the creaking old metal gate
That opens wide its fatigued frame, exuding welcome grace,
Lamenting of rusted hinges, squeaking of weathered fate.

Buoying on impulses serene, you enter boldly realm green
Fixated in pristine meadows~ burbling tenor of streams,
Holding my indulgent embrace, there you proudly preen,
For being blessed to own endearing piece of idyllic dreams;

Envisioning an intimate chalet, built on love felt and known,
Where cattle graze, birds built nests, animals freely roam,
Among paradise of orchards, vines, bedazzling as it’s grown,
While rusty old gate, loath to moan, beholds bliss of home.

July 1, 2022
Placed 1st: One In Five Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Joseph May

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Mike Bayles July 20, 2022 at 8:41 AM Such nice imagery.

Eve Roper July 13, 2022 at 8:57 AM Your words that wrap around beauty are just stunning, Vijay. Those memories of living on a farm and remembering the sounds it's environment makes. The rusty gate squeaks as it try's to move like frail bones. Lovely write my friend... Blessings

Regina Mcintosh July 13, 2022 at 6:54 AM Enchanting reflections... beautiful. Peaceful, warm... idyllic. Lovely. God bless you warmly, Love, Gina

Sara Kendrick July 12, 2022 at 1:50 PM Very descriptive and expressive work you have penned in this one for the contest. Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. I could almost see the scene. Your visit to my page made my day. Sara

Mystic Rose Rose July 12, 2022 at 1:09 PM Those gates are opened wide now as wide as my smile for you, Congrats on your winning poem dear Vijay, hugs

Paula Goldsmith July 12, 2022 at 8:34 AM Congratulations on this win. A beautiful write/story. Good memories are the best. Love your line, "While rusty old gate, loath to moan, beholds bliss of home." You are home. Today, be blessed writing away..........

Linda Alice Fowler July 12, 2022 at 5:33 AM Vijay my friend, your imagery and use of alliteration, onomatopoeia, and perfect rhyme and meter wraps me in a comfortable quilt of forgotten dreams and nostalgia. This is a fav for me! Linda Vijay Pandit July 12, 2022 at 6:21 AM Your comments are much more eloquent than my poem my friend. Much appreciate your kind remarks and especially your FAVE. Many thanks for your visit and comments, Linda.

Christuraj Alex July 11, 2022 at 8:21 PM "Bliss o home" - Beautifully said. Congratulations! Vijay Pandit July 12, 2022 at 6:19 AM Thank you Christuraj.

Joseph May July 11, 2022 at 4:34 PM The treasured memories of the old house, Very nicely penned Vijay, Congrats on your win Vijay Pandit July 12, 2022 at 6:19 AM Much appreciate your visit and kind feedback. Many thanks for sponsoring contests, Joseph.

Valsa George July 11, 2022 at 9:31 AM Back to your beautiful poem with Congratulations on your first place win in Joseph May's contest ! Vijay Pandit July 12, 2022 at 6:18 AM Thank you Valsa--much appreciate.

Kim Rodrigues July 11, 2022 at 9:09 AM Withered memories invigorate, That opens wide its fatigued frame and the final line! You bring us to old memories! God bless you, dear friend! ~ Kim Vijay Pandit July 12, 2022 at 6:18 AM Thank you dear friend for your kind remarks. Much appreciate your visit and comments, Kim.

Deb M July 10, 2022 at 7:24 AM Memories beautifully worded and conveyed Vijay….another beauty …..Debx Vijay Pandit July 12, 2022 at 6:17 AM Thank you Deb--much appreciate.

Connie Marcum Wong July 9, 2022 at 11:21 PM How nostalgic your lovely poem makes me feel Vijay. Minus the rusty gate, there was a rusty windmill at our great grandparents homestead. The cows roaming in the tall grasses. It is sad to see the place vacant and beyond repair with fond memories in faded black and white photographs which pictured how grand it once was. I adore your beautiful poem that touched my heart. A Fave! I hope this is a top winner for you my dear friend. Blessings xxoo Vijay Pandit July 12, 2022 at 6:17 AM It was delightful to read your comments about your fond childhood memories. Much appreciate valued comments my dear friend and most certainly your FAVE. Heartfelt thanks for both, Connie.

Paul Callus July 9, 2022 at 3:18 AM This old rusty gate opens on to a flood of memories, Vijay. Excellent imagery takes the reader along with you to beautiful childhood years. ~ Regards // paul Vijay Pandit July 9, 2022 at 3:16 PM Glad you stopped by, Paul, with your kind remarks. Appreciate your insightful feedback. Many thanks. Regards.

Michael Tor July 8, 2022 at 9:22 PM Childhood memories of a special place that resonates within you. The Old Rusty Gate sets of Dear emotions and memories that live within all who treasure a special memory of a location, object, or place. Touching piece Vijay enjoyed reading my friend... Vijay Pandit July 9, 2022 at 3:14 PM Much appreciate your insights on childhood memories, Michael. Many thanks for stopping by with your kind remarks.

Anne-Lise Andresen July 7, 2022 at 10:01 AM - Lots of emotions in old memories ... a wonderful poem, Vijay :) - Best wishes in the contest - Have a lovely summer :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Vijay Pandit July 9, 2022 at 3:13 PM Thank you Anne-Lise. You are always very kind. Much appreciate your visit and comments.

Mystic Rose Rose July 6, 2022 at 3:17 PM No greater hearth to share with a loved one than an old rustic place with a lovely groaning gate that says, please come in, I'm still open, lovely poem as always you speak volumes to my mind and heart, have a great day Vijay :) Vijay Pandit July 9, 2022 at 3:12 PM Much appreciate your kind, insightful comments, Vienna. Many thanks.

Kim Rodrigues July 6, 2022 at 6:37 AM Favorite part: Amid mooing calls of cows, where mango trees gently sway, Waltzing echoes of yore, clucking~ clattering hens convey. :) Vijay Pandit July 6, 2022 at 8:38 AM Glad you liked the voice of poem --echoes of past clattering. Many thanks, Kim.

Bill Baker July 5, 2022 at 1:31 PM Wonderful poem, Vijay. the imagery and depth of descriptions was complete. I enjoyed the poem and the comforting thoughts of home. Great entry for the contest my friend. Have a great day! Bill Vijay Pandit July 6, 2022 at 8:37 AM So very kind of you, Bill. Much appreciate your visit and comments. Many thanks.

Andrea Dietrich July 5, 2022 at 9:25 AM wow, you did really well with that theme of the old rusty gate. So rustic and charming this is, Vijay. Vijay Pandit July 6, 2022 at 8:36 AM Glad to hear that, Andrea--especially from you. Much appreciate. Many thanks.

Mike Gentile July 4, 2022 at 5:33 AM The memory is such a powerful and beautiful ting Vijay! It has allowed you to once again create a beautiful poem filled with lovely images that have allowed to to also the The Old Rusty Gate! Happy Monday! Vijay Pandit July 4, 2022 at 7:06 AM Many thanks Mike--much appreciate your visit and comments, as always.

Joseph P. DiMino July 4, 2022 at 3:15 AM Lovely read! Really, for me also, amidst the decay, I choose to highlight the good in my life, having been blessed with much. Yes, I have had great grief as well, but such things pale, to my mind, in the light of fond places and acquaintances -- especially the miracle of love. Vijay Pandit July 4, 2022 at 7:06 AM Such inspiring sentiments you convey my friend. Positive outlook, such as yours, makes all the difference in the end. Much appreciate your visit and comments, Joe. Many thanks.

Harry Horsman July 3, 2022 at 7:41 PM It never fails to amaze me how some simple thing from the past, such as you so admirably write on 'The Old Rusty Gate' becomes so important in the memory game. As usual Vijay the poetry here superb. Vijay Pandit July 4, 2022 at 7:04 AM So very kind of you Harry. Yes-- we all visit our past from time to time. Much appreciate your visit and comments. Many thanks.

Janice Canerdy July 3, 2022 at 10:41 AM Vijay, this is nostalgia at its loveliest, most vividly descriptive best! I sometimes visit an old homeplace from my early childhood. The house is gone, but I can visuslize the little four-room house as plain in as day! Janice Vijay Pandit July 4, 2022 at 7:03 AM I know what you mean. Memories is all we have when past is so far gone. Much appreciate your visit and comments, Janice. Many thanks for your kind remarks.

Supraja Kannan July 2, 2022 at 10:54 PM What a beautiful poetry!!! Such lovely memories to cherish... " Rusty old gate, beholds bliss of home " loved this line, it says a lot... Faving it... This is definitely a winner and deserves POTD/ POTW Vijay Pandit July 3, 2022 at 7:23 AM So glad you liked the poem, Supraja. Much appreciate your vote of confidence, your kind remarks, and especially your FAVE. Many thanks for your insightful feedback and faving this poem.

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