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The Old Rusty Gate

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Through the old rusty gate, got into the courtyard. Laid my hand on the metal door handle, And twisting it, it opened wide showing the dark inside With a mouldy smell entering my nostrils The rooms were dusty, full of cracks and fissures With cobwebs hanging from the rafters Photos of ancestors were hung on the walls ‘Lions’ that lost their teeth who prided over their ancestry A house long abandoned and its inmates scattered A symbol of dissension and discord A house that neither was a home nor a haven Lacking in the spirit of unity, each at daggers drawn Rebuke and displeasure, squabbles and mean talk, Destroyed the quiet and peace of its inmates Dreading each wave and swell that came one by one The members of the family drifted over turbulent currents Slowly it got disintegrated, now lies in total wreck Holding dark secrets hidden in its dingy attic Not a soul now sets foot in this ravaged compound With a desiccated homestead from which love has long fled June.24.2022 ~Placed Second~ In Five Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Joseph May Chosen Subject: The Old Rusty Gate

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Date: 7/12/2022 8:42:00 AM
Congratulations on this win. A beautiful write. Good memories are the best kind. Be blessed writing away..........
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Date: 7/11/2022 8:24:00 PM
Yet, it has memories. Beautifully written. Congratulations!
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Date: 6/25/2022 4:39:00 AM
Very descriptive and expressive work about the old homestead. I wonder was the original owner and wife in love at one time. I enjoyed readding your contest entry. Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for dropping by my page. Sara
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Date: 6/24/2022 6:38:00 PM
Pandora's Box is best left closed! Aloha!
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Date: 6/24/2022 5:36:00 AM
Emotions vested in this rusty old gate resonate in your lovely verse with awesome details that bring forth the images. Excellent as always. Much longing you convey, Valsa, in this emotive write. Best to you.
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Date: 6/24/2022 4:23:00 AM
Valsa, you did an excellent job of evoking the reader's imagination with your writing. I really appreciated the amazing visual that your words created. I hope you have a high placement in the contest.
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Date: 6/24/2022 4:11:00 AM
A touching and nostalgic poem I can relate to, Valsa. Best wishes for the contest.
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Date: 6/23/2022 10:12:00 PM
Stupendous imagery. Should earn a high place in the contest. Hugs.
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