Pat Adams Poet Concrete

The Old Man

One day I
                                               noticed an old man Walking
                                                           and humming
                                                         a song. Stopping
                                                       I said, "excuse me
                                                           sir, may I ask,
                                                             how have
                                                        you lived so long?"
                                                      He then turned off his
                                                     radio, touching his old
                                                 chin for a bit. He said,"ok I'll 
                                              tell  you friend About my         life
                                        style    this is it." I always have      me 
                                   some         whiskey Before bed      and 
                                 x                    when I get up. Smok-
                                x                        ing four packs of
                               x                    cigs a day, I also put 
                              x                 gin in my    coffee cup
                             x              I can't say      I exercise
                            x            I'll not            walk if 
                           x              I have               a car. I
                          x                 lay and              watch tv
                         x                      all day                and all
                       x                   night, I                 hang out

                                 at a bar!  I was surprised and told him so
                                  “That's not how I thought it would be,
                                       may I ask how old are you now?”
                                        He said, “Oh, I'm thirty three!”

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Carolyn Devonshire January 18, 2019 at 4:06 PM Wow, I didn't see that punch line coming. Was too busy marveling at how such an old man could have been smoking and drinking to excess all his life. Then you hit me at the end. Wonder how he'll look at 83, should he survive that long. I like your style and admire the way you were able to create an image of the man with the cane. Awesome! Pat Adams January 18, 2019 at 6:07 PM Thank you Carolyn, that's really sweet of you to say! It's kind of hard, with a lot over "Do overs" but rewarding in the end, especially with such wonderful comments!!!!..............80)..........pat

Lindsay Laurie January 15, 2019 at 4:37 PM A visual artist as well as a very humorous writer you are Pat. Loved this verse - Lindsay Pat Adams January 16, 2019 at 3:24 PM I think more of a jack of all trades but master at none, but I do appreciate the comment!! ........... PAT

Ilene Bauer January 15, 2019 at 3:23 PM ha! amazing how you created that picture, pat! well done (and a funny poem, too!) Pat Adams January 15, 2019 at 4:21 PM Thanks Ilene! I'm kind of hung up on the form. It's aggravating but rewarding in the end............pat

Michelle Faulkner January 15, 2019 at 1:02 PM I heard a story on the news about a man who was about 112 years old, and he said the secret was smoking cigars every day - take that, doctors! Pat Adams January 15, 2019 at 4:16 PM Yeah, it seems kind of like a crap shoot sometimes!!,,,,,,,,,,80)