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Just a little scibble that came to me in a 'moment.'

Painting by Tomasz Rut

The night we made poetry

Last night,
I had a dream -
after so long,
I saw your face..

Those eyes looked straight at me.
I felt emotions not felt for so long -
like I was the moon,
my tears fell like stardust.

Finally,
I began to breathe,
sleeping but walking awake -
before you took me in your arms.

One soft touch,
I was floating,
lost the sense of existence -
time was frozen

as you carried me through marigold horizons

I felt - everything would be all right -
in angst there was contentment -
for a moment I was happy -
as you sang me a song

then

you paused in a sweet gaze
I still recall your lips move closer 
before we touched - motionless.

Lost in clouds,
tongues wrote sonnets
for angels to recite -
but they found shame 
in unmetered rhymes.

We walked upon ascending stairs,
until we reached majestic gates -
then you let go of my hand.

The sun was cruel at dawn,
I awoke once again alone -
with scarlet marks left on my mouth
and your sweet scent left behind -
but you were gone.

I wondered if you would return
for one final kiss - maybe a slight touch

slowly, time stopped ticking -
upon my last breath
I pondered if you would read my poems -
just like the night we made poetry.
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George Avatar
January 12, 2024 at 11:16 PM
The title captured me. There are many poems of you that I haven't read. I am never free to relax or engage in creative endeavors because of pressing responsibilities. You are equally good on capturing melancholy and romance. What a soulful poem dear Silent one. "Lost in clouds, tongues wrote sonnets for angels to recite - but they found shame in unmetered rhymes." Oh great.... ! Indeed a lovey dovey moment !
Dietrich Avatar
January 11, 2024 at 1:17 PM
this is really beautiful. But I am curious why the angels found shame in unmetered rhymes. I guess because they were non traditional sonnets? I always like your "little scribbles"
Poet Avatar
January 11, 2024 at 9:54 AM
Your writing is truly exquisite, displaying a remarkable level of artistry. The allure of the title, as it irresistibly captivated my attention. The poem itself is both rejuvenating and captivating, as each word ensnared my consciousness, leaving me entranced by your existence. Your ability to evoke such powerful emotions through your writing is amazing. I am thoroughly enamored by this piece, and the fact that it seemingly flowed effortlessly from your mind only adds to its brilliance.
Pandit Avatar
January 11, 2024 at 6:22 AM
We walked upon ascending stairs, until we reached majestic gates -then you let go of my hand. The sun was cruel at dawn, I awoke once again alone ---so heartfelt, saddened in parting. Echoes of love and goodbye resonate throughout, SO. Excellent as always, my friend.
Williams Avatar
January 11, 2024 at 2:46 AM
Your little scribbles put mine to shame., I have to spend so much time on my poetry. Your Muse seems to favour these quick downloads. From the dream to the wake-up, your romantic poetic lines are absolutely brilliant, with scarlet marks left on your mouth, which was a great touch. Absolutely a Fave S1...Hugs
Seeker Avatar
January 10, 2024 at 11:34 PM
Beautiful and so moving in every detail, Silent One. Enjoyed immensely.
May Avatar
January 10, 2024 at 9:07 PM
A poignant write of loss and longing, Very nicely penned Silent
Herrick Avatar
January 10, 2024 at 8:58 PM
Awesome poem ! "...Lost in clouds, tongues wrote sonnets for angels to recite - but they found shame in unmetered rhymes." ~woah !
Leiser Avatar
January 10, 2024 at 7:59 PM
Such powerful, magnetic verse, and utterly romantic, Silent. You definitely captured the emotions with your words…excellent! :)
Rolland Avatar
January 10, 2024 at 4:44 PM
wonderful poem, and moving, "un seul être vous manque et tout est dépeuplé" Lamartine (french poet from 1800s) thanks for the inspiring poem SO
Rose  Avatar
January 10, 2024 at 11:37 AM
Now who on earth would come up with a title like that ? Only You, and the poem is a living essence of beauty, and sweet scented passion !
Jones Avatar
January 10, 2024 at 11:22 AM
The title drew me in like a moth to flame and the poem itself was refreshing and very engaging. It was like I was a fish on the line each word reeling me into your existence! Wonderful emotional writing! Loved it and it came to you in a moment? Wow.
Empress Avatar
January 10, 2024 at 9:34 AM
Wow just as i said you wrote an impeccable writ you come back with another brilliant one that left me awestruck, truly captivated by the flow storytelling and depth of emotions you’ve expressed in such eloquence: ive missed reading your evocative and romantic poems, truly this one touched my soul, and left me in love with love! Where do i evn start. I know dreams like that: and this dream really resonated with me. “ the night we made poetry” whoa! What a line! Can you set that as a prompt? Realy
Empress Avatar
January 10, 2024 at 9:35 AM
“Lost in clouds, tongues wrote sonnets for angels to recite - but they found shame in unmetered rhymes.” This i want to quote, actually print out and frame it! So good so catchy so unique and so beautifully romantic! I also love “ upon my last breath I pondered if you would read my poems - just like the night we made poetry.” Literally made me cry! I love love this! This is a fave for me
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