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Just a little scibble that came to me in a 'moment.'

Painting by Tomasz Rut

Last night, I had a dream - after so long, I saw your face.. Those eyes looked straight at me. I felt emotions not felt for so long - like I was the moon, my tears fell like stardust. Finally, I began to breathe, sleeping but walking awake - before you took me in your arms. One soft touch, I was floating, lost the sense of existence - time was frozen as you carried me through marigold horizons I felt - everything would be all right - in angst there was contentment - for a moment I was happy - as you sang me a song then you paused in a sweet gaze I still recall your lips move closer before we touched - motionless. Lost in clouds, tongues wrote sonnets for angels to recite - but they found shame in unmetered rhymes. We walked upon ascending stairs, until we reached majestic gates - then you let go of my hand. The sun was cruel at dawn, I awoke once again alone - with scarlet marks left on my mouth and your sweet scent left behind - but you were gone. I wondered if you would return for one final kiss - maybe a slight touch slowly, time stopped ticking - upon my last breath I pondered if you would read my poems - just like the night we made poetry.

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Date: 1/12/2024 11:16:00 PM
The title captured me. There are many poems of you that I haven't read. I am never free to relax or engage in creative endeavors because of pressing responsibilities. You are equally good on capturing melancholy and romance. What a soulful poem dear Silent one. "Lost in clouds, tongues wrote sonnets for angels to recite - but they found shame in unmetered rhymes." Oh great.... ! Indeed a lovey dovey moment !
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Date: 1/11/2024 1:17:00 PM
this is really beautiful. But I am curious why the angels found shame in unmetered rhymes. I guess because they were non traditional sonnets? I always like your "little scribbles"
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Date: 1/11/2024 9:54:00 AM
Your writing is truly exquisite, displaying a remarkable level of artistry. The allure of the title, as it irresistibly captivated my attention. The poem itself is both rejuvenating and captivating, as each word ensnared my consciousness, leaving me entranced by your existence. Your ability to evoke such powerful emotions through your writing is amazing. I am thoroughly enamored by this piece, and the fact that it seemingly flowed effortlessly from your mind only adds to its brilliance.
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Date: 1/11/2024 6:22:00 AM
We walked upon ascending stairs, until we reached majestic gates -then you let go of my hand. The sun was cruel at dawn, I awoke once again alone ---so heartfelt, saddened in parting. Echoes of love and goodbye resonate throughout, SO. Excellent as always, my friend.
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Date: 1/11/2024 2:46:00 AM
Your little scribbles put mine to shame., I have to spend so much time on my poetry. Your Muse seems to favour these quick downloads. From the dream to the wake-up, your romantic poetic lines are absolutely brilliant, with scarlet marks left on your mouth, which was a great touch. Absolutely a Fave S1...Hugs
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Date: 1/10/2024 11:34:00 PM
Beautiful and so moving in every detail, Silent One. Enjoyed immensely.
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Date: 1/10/2024 9:07:00 PM
A poignant write of loss and longing, Very nicely penned Silent
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Date: 1/10/2024 8:58:00 PM
Awesome poem ! "...Lost in clouds, tongues wrote sonnets for angels to recite - but they found shame in unmetered rhymes." ~woah !
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Date: 1/10/2024 7:59:00 PM
Such powerful, magnetic verse, and utterly romantic, Silent. You definitely captured the emotions with your words…excellent! :)
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Date: 1/10/2024 4:44:00 PM
wonderful poem, and moving, "un seul être vous manque et tout est dépeuplé" Lamartine (french poet from 1800s) thanks for the inspiring poem SO
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Date: 1/10/2024 3:30:00 PM
Got me in the mood for makin' a little poetry myself tonight. Dreamy sexy poem O not so silent one
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Date: 1/10/2024 11:37:00 AM
Now who on earth would come up with a title like that ? Only You, and the poem is a living essence of beauty, and sweet scented passion !
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Date: 1/10/2024 11:22:00 AM
The title drew me in like a moth to flame and the poem itself was refreshing and very engaging. It was like I was a fish on the line each word reeling me into your existence! Wonderful emotional writing! Loved it and it came to you in a moment? Wow.
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Date: 1/10/2024 10:05:00 AM
absolutely brilliant and evocative romantic poem. The title, "the night we made poetry" was creative and perfect. You wow me everyday with your extraordinary talent. You're one of a kind. Have a great day, Sara
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Date: 1/10/2024 9:34:00 AM
Wow just as i said you wrote an impeccable writ you come back with another brilliant one that left me awestruck, truly captivated by the flow storytelling and depth of emotions you’ve expressed in such eloquence: ive missed reading your evocative and romantic poems, truly this one touched my soul, and left me in love with love! Where do i evn start. I know dreams like that: and this dream really resonated with me. “ the night we made poetry” whoa! What a line! Can you set that as a prompt? Realy
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Date: 1/10/2024 9:35:00 AM
“Lost in clouds, tongues wrote sonnets for angels to recite - but they found shame in unmetered rhymes.” This i want to quote, actually print out and frame it! So good so catchy so unique and so beautifully romantic! I also love “ upon my last breath I pondered if you would read my poems - just like the night we made poetry.” Literally made me cry! I love love this! This is a fave for me

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