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You had that future retro look: two thousand seventeen, There was a slow and sultry permanence, a little slouchy lean As you eased out of the taxi before it shot off to the right, Who could have predicted what was goin' down that night. Your totemic injunctions had me circled all around, You acutely walled the sky off, left no escape route underground, You had me penned tight in the doghouse, you could take me to the pound, You were non-responsive until I proposed our sorrows drown. I said I knew a house of brew, a joint of many gin Where all ice would be broken through, where inhibitions would wear thin Enough that we'd abandon ruse and hauteur, Whatever were our drinks of choice, we'd pound 'em down like water. There we were with truth in hand, it was a pub down by the shore, But it seemed like what I'd planned out wasn't working anymore. My river of charm didn't lack words, you were just too wary, You talked and walked me backwards, up every tributary. There was something to this watery theme, to you it seemed to please, I remarked how strong a drink seemed, you said my glass you'd ease. Your finger wavered in a blur, now was the sauce polluted? I took a taste and sure enough - perfectly diluted. I would have sworn that I saw droplets form within the air, And fall into the blessed vessel, to caress the dear gin there. Indeed I could have stayed all night, but you promptly punctured that baloon, You paid the bill, pulled me upright, marched me away from the saloon. Did you have a halo, the faintest rainbow hover there, The gentlest gauzy prismatic glow that almost touched your hair, The eye was instantly drawn to you, of that there was no doubt, No wonder so many people were getting their smart phones out. Twenty-seven pug dogs also trotted out because They were hilariously exuberant and light upon their paws, Faces all bright, with rumps and claws that increase social media views, Their wagging tongues and happy jaws were gonna make the news. And all the oysters and the clams rose up upon their hocks To pour out of the tavern doors and run along the docks. Perhaps I should have told you that these were seafood bars, As arm in arm we walked along, to the whispering sand and stars. Now you didn't have a tail, but there might have been a siren song Playing airily in the background, a delicate treading from right to wrong, And the softest kiss that could ever be, you gave me upon the beach, I felt somehow removed from myself, like I was out of reach. You put your arms above your head, oh - 'twas a sinuous view Of all your harms, my newlywed, as the world twirled anew, While sand devils and waterspouts spun mad in insane art, I felt myself vaporize as I was swiftly pulled apart. Born fast aloft, cloistered, rising on a cyclone's gyrating surge, I coalesced as moisture, into droplets I did merge. Then foul gravity - ever greedy, ignoble and vain, Upon the sands of all the souls, my body fell like rain. Yes, gravity - the evil one - took my flight away from me, If you will forgive a pun, I needed my anti gravi tea. The horizon was all dread dark clouds and thunder's threatening roar, From the rage it was apparent that this storm had been beaten before. So - if I was used to quench the thirsty sands then it was no great fraud, My last awareness was hearing, 'Daughter of the River God.'

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Date: 4/15/2017 3:23:00 AM
Monumental writing. Wish it had been mine
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Date: 4/15/2017 1:07:00 PM
Thank you, Declan.
Date: 4/12/2017 12:20:00 PM
Wunderbar, Doug. Pure poetry at the highest apex. Keep the anti-grav tea handy. Don't come down from that blissful, creative place you abode in. Beautiful mix of humor, sensuality and mysticism. Such a powerful muse brew. Cosmic poetry, my friend. Love and joy to you.
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Date: 4/12/2017 6:36:00 PM
Thank you, Freddie. I think those muses have access to a whole cabinet of the good stuff; perhaps they give us a taste once in a while.
Date: 4/10/2017 5:09:00 PM
..saw this beauty on the home feature page..and.. I see, I missed POTW honours..my bad:) Congratulations on All the well deserved recognition Doug:) ...You and your poetry are worth celebrating.xx I am so happy for you:)
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Date: 4/10/2017 5:54:00 PM
Hey Lynn. : ) Thank you.
Date: 4/7/2017 3:12:00 PM
Great Read !! I couldn't stop and stayed all the way through. That means a lot to me when I read long poetry.
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Date: 4/7/2017 4:17:00 PM
Thanks, Lenna. : ) It should be fun to read...
Date: 3/22/2017 7:57:00 PM
A dazzling if somewhat moist opus. Only a true master would rhyme fruad and God. Cheers
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Date: 3/22/2017 8:09:00 PM
Hi Dave. : ) Ha! Well - perhaps a master of silliness. Had fun with this one.
Date: 3/17/2017 9:21:00 PM
What a wonderful tale you tell of the Daughter of the River God. Left me wanting to hear more. Congratulations Doug
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Date: 3/22/2017 8:08:00 PM
Thank you, Maria. : ) Glad to hear that - it's already a fairly long poem for PoetrySoup... Cheers, Doug.
Date: 3/17/2017 7:13:00 AM
Exceptionally, delightful, entertainingly delicious story telling my friend.. Sorry to be so late to find this gem, but better late than never. Automatic 7 and a new fav..
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Date: 3/17/2017 12:14:00 PM
Ahoy, me hearty! Merci beaucoup, mon ami.
Date: 3/12/2017 10:44:00 AM
It'll do it every time, and you wake up on the bathroom flour. Love, daver
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Date: 3/12/2017 8:26:00 PM
Ah Daver, my mom opened the bathroom door and hit me in the head with the bottom of it....
Date: 3/10/2017 8:01:00 PM
wow, what a tale!! Daughter of River God, YES! That title is ingenious!! Congrats I see it was a POTD.
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Date: 3/11/2017 8:15:00 PM
Ha! Thank you for your enthusiasm, Andrea. : )
Date: 3/10/2017 8:03:00 AM
Doug such an awesome write and CONGRATULATIONS on Poem Of The Week ~
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Date: 3/10/2017 11:24:00 AM
Muchas gracias, Constance. : ) Here's to all the waters of the world - cheers!
Date: 3/9/2017 4:16:00 PM
What a lofty poem this is. I love it much. Thanks for sharing and congrats on POTW. A fav and Eight stars. Marilyn
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Date: 3/10/2017 11:16:00 AM
Hi Marilyn. : ) "Lofty" - well now thank you! Didn't see that one coming. ; )
Date: 3/7/2017 3:29:00 PM
What a wonderful tale Doug congrats on POTW:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/7/2017 11:31:00 PM
Thank you, Jan. : )
Date: 3/6/2017 5:19:00 AM
WoW! Doug, this is great story telling. Congratulations on getting the poem of the week. It was well deserved: -) Alexis
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Date: 3/7/2017 11:30:00 PM
Glad you stopped by, Alexis. : )
Date: 3/5/2017 8:33:00 PM
Interesting poem.... congrats on being featured....
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Date: 3/7/2017 11:14:00 PM
Good to see you, Bernard. Thanks. : )
Date: 3/5/2017 6:13:00 PM
Great story telling. Congrats in POTW!
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Date: 3/7/2017 11:13:00 PM
Hey Richard. : ) I appreciate that.
Date: 3/2/2017 12:04:00 AM
Love the title. Love the poem. Love the attention to detail. Love everything. John
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Date: 3/7/2017 11:12:00 PM
Dang, John, why so negative? Seriously - : ) - thank you, my friend.
Date: 2/27/2017 5:49:00 PM
This is one of those entries that must be read slowly and with full attention to savor its beauty because this is beautiful. The reader can see attention to detail. Be proud of such an exceptional write and title.
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Date: 3/10/2017 11:21:00 AM
Cute flowers as well.
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Date: 2/27/2017 7:50:00 PM
Thank you, Lisa. : ) And that's a cute bird.
Date: 2/27/2017 9:51:00 AM
Lovely! I don't always read the lengthy poems but your poem drew me in! Exquisite! 7
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Date: 2/27/2017 1:06:00 PM
Cheers, Kim. : ) I am conscious of that length thing - I feel it too when reading poems, especially if they don't fit in one page view and you have to scroll down. Knowing your audience is part of it, and I'm determined to work on the 3 to 5 stanza types.
Date: 2/27/2017 9:11:00 AM
This one just climbed to the top of the ladder of my all time favorite Doug the Dapper poet poems, though it is sharing the top rung with your poem "One thing that love is" , they compliment each other so all is good. Nicely done.
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Date: 2/27/2017 1:04:00 PM
Thank you, Chris. This one didn't totally happen, though. ; P A good and bouncy tune doesn't hurt, once in a while.
Date: 2/27/2017 8:31:00 AM
...one of the most imaginative, comprehensive witty stories I have ever read :-) the pace is quick, the language, marvelous with vivid imagery that keeps on going. "Your totemic injunctions had me circled all around"...a crazy good line:-) I love everything about your poem. 7+++++ Bravo blessings, lynn
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Date: 2/27/2017 1:01:00 PM
Makes me smile, Lynn. : )
Date: 2/27/2017 7:47:00 AM
The allure of your words was like being offered a cold lemon aid from the local stand set up by the neighbor kids, refreshing with a sweet after taste. Emile.
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Date: 2/27/2017 7:53:00 AM
Cheers, Emile. "Sweet after taste" - yeah! : )
Date: 2/27/2017 2:55:00 AM
- This I must say is a wonderful little story, Doug (!!!) - A 7 - You've really put a lot work into this - A lovely picture at the top - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/27/2017 7:52:00 AM
Hi Anne-Lise. : ) Glad you like it - supposed to be a bouncy little thing - ended up fairly long for a PoetrySoup submission, but you'll have that once in a while... :p
Date: 2/27/2017 1:30:00 AM
That's a truly beautiful painting you used Doug :) and wow wow, what a great poem! " You had that future retro look: two thousand seventeen,..//.. There was a slow and sultry permanence, a little slouchy lean..//" Daughter of the River God. I love this poem...
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Date: 2/27/2017 7:42:00 AM
Cheers, Darren. A painting by Edward Armitage, 129 years ago (back when I didn't even have a computer). So you know the deal - Greek mythology had the Sirens as dangerous creatures with hypnotic voices and sweet-sounding instruments to lure sailors in, where they would crash their ships upon rocks. Roman poets mentioned them a bit, too. (400 character limit kiss my butt.)
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Date: 2/27/2017 7:41:00 AM
Traditionally, they were considered to be daughters of Archelous 'The River God' - he being the patron of the Archelous River in Greece, which retains similar names today. It was rather a demotion - in earlier times he'd been said to rule over all water, period. Bummer, man... It is thought that the medieval 'Green Man' is derived from Archelous.
Date: 2/26/2017 11:50:00 PM
A wonderfully, imaginative tale, Doug, with the perfect blend of wit and imagery! I was a captive audience start to finish...thanks for sharing and thanks for your lovely visits tonight. Hugs, Rhonda
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Doug Vinson
Date: 2/27/2017 12:15:00 AM
Cheers, Rhonda. : ) Some poems are work, and some are fun - this was a fun one.

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