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The Mother To His Daughter

Dark hair Anemic skin Soft misty eyes So young how could I know T’was only on her good days I was allowed by her bedside In an ever quiet house Shades drawn Kids told to hush No reason given I vaguely remember relatives Their silent grim faces Lined up taking turns Down to the end of the hall While I eyed in the corner That tall off-limits piano No one ever played Too young to understand My ever pensive solemn uncle Was dealing with becoming a widower Losing the mother to his daughter My twelve-year old cousin Somehow she’d need to cope Growing up in a grief filled home Where laughter would never be heard The blinds kept drawn For death to linger ever present AP: Honorable Mention 2020 Submitted on February 19, 2018 for STANDARD CONTEST NO 70 sponsored by BRIAN STRAND

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Date: 2/21/2018 4:18:00 PM
I was wondering about that title when I saw it on your list of poems---What a marvelous treat to read such a true-to-life account of the impact of the loss of a life! Thank you for the treat. :-) Gershon
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Date: 2/21/2018 6:11:00 PM
Thank you so much, Gerson. I really appreciate your visit and comment.
Date: 2/20/2018 6:22:00 PM
Such a sad write, Line. I especially love the line about the piano. It really added to the story. Amazing talent.
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Line Gauthier
Date: 2/20/2018 8:58:00 PM
Thank you, Rhoda. Much appreciated visit and comment.
Date: 2/20/2018 3:32:00 PM
this is so sad and you captured very well that feeling in time, LIne. I really like this one. Also thanks for my win in your recent contest. I hope you have a beautiful evening. I am not even half done with replies to comments and I need to get home now!! Wish me luck catching up.
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Line Gauthier
Date: 2/20/2018 3:56:00 PM
Thank you so much, Andrea. If anyone can do it, you can.
Date: 2/20/2018 12:50:00 PM
Good portrayal of the mourning gathering thru the eyes of a child. I felt her thinking, learning, absorbing - sad, huh? Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Line Gauthier
Date: 2/20/2018 3:56:00 PM
Thank you, CayCay. Most appreciated.
Date: 2/20/2018 9:55:00 AM
So sad, Line, You've set the tone perfectly for the reader with your moving poem !!
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Line Gauthier
Date: 2/20/2018 10:16:00 AM
Thank you, Mike. Much appreciated visit and comment.
Date: 2/20/2018 9:38:00 AM
I can relate to this, as many can when they must face those last hours. A strong write, Line, well done. Regards viv
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Line Gauthier
Date: 2/20/2018 10:15:00 AM
Thank you, Viv. Much appreciated visit and comment.
Date: 2/20/2018 7:05:00 AM
That tall off-limits piano No one ever played - an overwhelming line ... a poignant write ...
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Line Gauthier
Date: 2/20/2018 8:44:00 AM
Thank you, Probir. Most appreciated visit and comment.
Date: 2/20/2018 6:36:00 AM
Cancer is an evil disease Line... you wrote an emotive poem..
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Line Gauthier
Date: 2/20/2018 8:44:00 AM
Thank you, SO. Most appreciated.
Date: 2/20/2018 4:01:00 AM
Great writing Line! You’ve painted a picture so very vivid with your words. Good luck in the contest! ~ Judy
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