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The Middle of the Night Vibes

I'm in the space, after the dream Where something lingers, just a while Outside a place it can be seen No man's land, a place of exile Unaware if safe or hostile Taken on current, just downstream Maybe unjustified revile I'm in the space, after the dream Edges of light seem to crossbeam I see a phone but can't dial Accepted order to redeem Where something lingers, just a while Still, mind races, mile after mile Creating thoughts of disesteem Sleep becomes unending trial Outside a place it can be seen Straining at weak points, near the seam Where the light leaves, seal with a spile Trying to connect thought or theme No man's land, a place of exile As the night breathes with unseen guile Worry courses through the bloodstream The lost memories, still tactile Sense invisible, silent scream I'm in the space

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Date: 3/22/2023 11:49:00 AM
Very dark and deep. I like your writing a lot.
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Date: 3/22/2023 12:17:00 PM
Thanks so much Paige, I was reading other poetry today and decided mine was rubbish - so it's nice to get a boost before I put down my pen (phone). Thanks for your kind words
Date: 3/18/2023 5:48:00 AM
Its the time when you remember your dream, but weirdly you forget it again later.. You described the feelings I have perfectly. A truly lovely poem DD
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Date: 3/18/2023 6:26:00 AM
Thanks Wen, it's that funny bit where you remember it until you try and remember and realise it's gone but it's left a gap :)
Date: 3/17/2023 2:13:00 AM
When a nightmare wakes you up, and you're still groggy to understand what's going on - you have brought it out beautifully, DD:)
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Date: 3/17/2023 2:19:00 AM
Thank you Jo:)
Date: 3/17/2023 12:01:00 AM
Great exploration of that strange world when the head is decapitated from its dream, fumbling to connect. Captured that twilight region in a well crafted poem..I liked how you threaded a tension throughout.
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Date: 3/17/2023 12:58:00 AM
Thanks Paul, it was all so visceral I thought it worth writing down. This one was cultivated further for the form and I used collections of ideas but the 'space after the dream' was tangible whilst awake in the night. Thank you for your positive feedback
Date: 3/16/2023 8:38:00 PM
Great use of this form imo, that space that seems so clear at the time but fuzzy hours later. Excellent write :)
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Date: 3/16/2023 11:42:00 PM
Thank you Hat :)

Book: Shattered Sighs