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The Melt Down

As ashen storm clouds brew above his head, his furrowed brow denotes catastrophe. The lash of his tongue like fire brings such dread a broken heart is all she can foresee. Heated anger joins the howl on winds misled, a wild child of tantrum's misdirected decree, his glacial heart disperses rocky scree. As ashen storm clouds brew above his head. Mother melts beneath his glare, few tears shed for him to see, her child she's failed by degree. Oh, all the signs of madness she'd misread, his furrowed brow denotes catastrophe. His wrath unleashed, now gone his kinder creed though she still sees his arms widespread, perhaps, a mother's love can intercede? The lash of his tongue like fire brings such dread. Unless his anger's dampened it may spread destroying the bonds of sweet felicity, if she can not hold on to love's thread a broken heart is all she can foresee. Son can't you see the sun high overhead upon his cheek a tears falls silently, with her arms outstretched his mother plead and on her shoulder he rested sullenly, as ashen storm clouds brew.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 12/23/2012 5:52:00 PM
Congratulations on your 1st place win.
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Date: 12/19/2012 4:25:00 AM
Congratulations on your super win my dear Deb! love/hugs, LG
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Date: 12/19/2012 2:45:00 AM
Congratulations on your top spot Debbie love, I feel honoured to share it with you xx
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Date: 12/19/2012 2:31:00 AM
Wow!!Congratulations my friend Debbie on your superb win. Wishing you a blessed Christmas. Hugs/Love Maria
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Date: 12/19/2012 12:41:00 AM
Wonderful and great piece of work,Debbie..Congrats on your well deserved win in this contest.....
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Date: 12/18/2012 11:32:00 PM
congratulations for your win, love to read more from you....love,Mehnaz
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Date: 12/18/2012 8:38:00 PM
D.G.,, 2 perceived opposite meanings when it comes to "FIRE And ICE" :-) Congratulations with your winning poem In , Carol's contest... goodnight~ PD
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Date: 12/18/2012 4:32:00 PM
A unique take on the topic.,Debs. He reminds me of the child of a storm god or something. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 12/18/2012 2:50:00 PM
well done Debbie ( got your name right this time) Lovely poem to read....Seren
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Date: 12/18/2012 1:45:00 PM
Thank you for supporting my contest and congratulations on your placement Debbie. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/5/2012 1:44:00 AM
Brilliant contrast,feel really humbled by the thoughts u deliver so poignantly...Thank u Debbie,for taking time to stop by.Ran out of time for your contest,oops. light and love ,Mehnaz
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Date: 12/4/2012 10:19:00 AM
A nice poem here with an interesting idea for fire and ice. Very imaginative and I like the rhymes. Thanks for helping me out with my form, I am somewhat new to poetry and not familiar with many of the forms. I really appreciate that you took some time to give me a hand. Have a wonderful Christmas!
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Date: 11/27/2012 9:41:00 PM
Uh-oh, this poor son faced his mother's wrath--this is my first introduction to a Rondeau Redouble, interest form, I love how it helps frame the tale.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 11/28/2012 6:34:00 AM
nope UT oh! This poor Mother faced her son's wrath..where did I miscommunicate!?
Date: 11/25/2012 10:45:00 PM
Wonderfully written Debbie! I love how you've tackled the relationship between mother and son - I think it's an interesting facet of humanity that a cold heart leads to a flaming tongue. Well done -and I love the form too. Nice! Very nice!
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Date: 11/25/2012 7:01:00 AM
Nothing short of perfection my dear Debbie....hugs Michael
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Date: 11/24/2012 7:23:00 PM
Great poem! Yes, I can see if this is a contest piece it looks like a winner to me as well.
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Date: 11/24/2012 5:41:00 PM
Reads like winning material..Good luck in the contest...Sara
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Date: 11/24/2012 3:42:00 PM
Debbie, your poem is great, I particulary like the emotional final stanza, so visual, full of love, well done. Constance
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