Carolyn Devonshire Poet Sonnet

The Man In the Middle

Our love had been built on a firm foundation
Trust, compassion and fidelity as well
I thought there’d be no cause for consternation
We thrived for a time in a magical spell
He was my white knight and I remained his belle
Never a doubt, certainly no confusion
Any misgivings his blue eyes would dispel
But moving in marked the end of illusion

~~~~~~~~~ Volta ~~~~~~~~~~
 
His son emerged from video seclusion
This twenty-year-old had never worked a day
He found my presence to be an intrusion
He flung jabs in attempts to drive me away
 
Thought we had it all, but his son was the boss
Now I’m struggling to recover from this loss


*Entry for Dr. Ram's Spenserian Sonnet contest

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Wiseton Prins March 23, 2011 at 4:45 AM Interesting... Never thought boys get jealous about their dads too... only thoght they get jealous when Mummy dates. Oi, sorry for the loss... i hope he's the one who chaged address to yours... your love i mean> always helps to keep two or three houses in relationships like this... u sneak away from the lot to savour the sweetness of ur love... like teenagers in love. all that sneaking around really is worth the thrill... should suggest it to ur love. >hey Carol... thanx 4 ur warming comments!

Nick Bagnall March 21, 2011 at 6:44 AM Well done, super first place, enjoyed the read.

Ellen Fahey March 17, 2011 at 6:38 PM Super! You just keep winning! So much talent you possess. Ellen

Barbara Gorelick March 16, 2011 at 4:30 PM Glad you at least got a winning poem out of that situation. Good work LNC..your on a roll...congrats. BG

Joyce Johnson March 16, 2011 at 3:41 PM Sorry about that, but better to find it out early that the child would rule. Congratulations on a great job and your big win. Love, Joyce

Debbie Guzzi March 16, 2011 at 12:21 PM Well worth a second read! My sympathies [I had this with a daughter] Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Carol Sunshine Brown March 16, 2011 at 8:15 AM Congratulations in the contest of Dr. Ram Mehta "The Spenserian Sonnet" Carolyn. A well deserved 1st place winner. Love, Carol

Dr Hitendra Mehta March 15, 2011 at 9:30 PM Kudos Carolyn for top notch position in Dr Ram's Spenserian contest with this creative piece. Hope it's just a fiction. Luv & best wishes - Hitendra Mehta

Tahera Mannan March 15, 2011 at 8:21 PM This is just superb Carolyn. Many warmest comgratulations for this win.

Gwendolen Song March 15, 2011 at 7:15 PM Whoahhh. If this a personal one, wow! Sounds like the son needed to get a life of his own. Love the couplets and flow. The ending definately left no one hanging. To win is sweeet bliss. Gwendolen

George Aul March 15, 2011 at 1:18 PM Congrats on your win........George

Andrew Crisci March 15, 2011 at 10:43 AM Big and heartfelt congratulations on your first place, Carolyn! People intrude in someone's life to cause harm out of the wickedness of their hearts...I am sorry for your loss because of his son who wanted to be the boss. He broke up a wonderful relationship with evil deeds and probably snarly remarks. Carolyn, you are a strong woman and your heart is filled with kindness...may be one day you will the courage and strenght to forgive him. Have a blessed day and smile. Peace and Love, Andrew.

Carrie Richards March 15, 2011 at 9:57 AM This was a powerful story, Carolyn, and so many people go through this same situation. Excellent job!! Congratulations on a fine win!!

John Freeman March 15, 2011 at 8:34 AM Awesome to see you at the top again Carolyn. Congratulations on your quite worthy poem's honored first place. Agape, Moses

Dr.Ram Mehta March 15, 2011 at 7:55 AM Congratulatioson the first place win in my contest, Carolyn

Jack Horne March 9, 2011 at 9:42 AM Great poem - hope it's just fiction! I often write about real life, but not always. If it's true life, hope it got it off your chest - I find writing a poem usually helps to ease hurt. Glad you liked the idea of the bluebells - it was lovely there - the spot was dug up for a road : (

Debbie Guzzi March 3, 2011 at 1:13 PM I hear ya had the same tale with a daughter! gah! children grow to terrorize their parents! Light & Love

Michelle Mac Donald February 26, 2011 at 4:48 AM Hey Carolyn! Nice rhyme, great flow, and certainly tells a story of how tough it can sometimes be. Oh those fledglings! Until they know how to fly and feel safe on their own, we might feel the air brush against us. Best to you, good luck in this contest! Mikki

Daver Austin February 16, 2011 at 1:23 PM NIGHTMARE! That video seclusion can be deadly - robs you of self-control, takes you away from real live people. Put that son back in the box. Hope you are recovered. LOve, Dave

Matthew Anish February 15, 2011 at 12:26 PM You wrote a sonnet! Pretty damn good! Is this a true story or is it fiction? Love & Peace Matthew Anish

Gert W. Knop February 14, 2011 at 5:05 AM Wow, Carolyn! Great write for Dr. Ram's contest. And I hope that this was pure fiction!...Have a great week ahead! love, Gert

Wilma Neels February 13, 2011 at 7:05 AM I am sorry that his son had to come between the two of you Carolyn.. It really is a beautiful write, love you, Wilma

Michael J. Falotico February 13, 2011 at 5:36 AM Excellent entry and sad words put together so well.. speechless by your talent...luv Michael

Wilma Neels February 13, 2011 at 5:08 AM Carolyn this is quite a superb take on Dr. Ram's contest.. Curious to know if this is fiction.. Brilliant entry and I am wishing you all the best with it as well.. Love Wilma

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen February 13, 2011 at 3:59 AM And such is the sad state of life, unfortunately, Carolyn! How good it is to know your place in the love-line BEFORE it was permanent!!! (Marriage could have been WORSE!) You are such a special and sweet spirit. God has something great in store for you. I am sure of it. Patience with calmness, first, my dear...Lovingly, Dane

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