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For The Man In The Elevator Poetry Contest  of Charles Messina

The Man in the Elevator - CM

The man in the elevator that I saw today -
(OH my gosh, I wondered how much did he weigh?)
I was looking all around (my fear I could not feign)
for the number of the pounds that the poor lift could sustain.
That man (how can I say it?) was elephantine!
His shoes I supposed to be a size sixteen.
He was taller than a baby (the kind named a giraffe).
If I weren’t in that elevator, maybe I would laugh!
There were eight of us in the elevator standing.
With him on board, we might be having a crash landing.
Before the door closed shut, I knew what I must do.
I raced past everyone, and out the door I flew.
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Messina Avatar
December 1, 2025 at 10:15 AM
Andrea, so funny and fun to read. Congratulations on your winning placement in my contest! Charlie :)
Dietrich Avatar
December 2, 2025 at 9:34 AM
Thanks so much. I love this kind of contest like you sponsored
Miller Avatar
December 1, 2025 at 8:21 AM
A very fun poem, congratulations
Poet Avatar
December 1, 2025 at 7:01 AM
So funny, Andrea, congratulations on your contest win, well-deserved.
Canerdy Avatar
December 1, 2025 at 6:37 AM
Made me smile. I'd be looking to escape too! CONGRATS on your win, Andrea! Janice
Kitchin Avatar
November 10, 2025 at 3:46 PM
Andrea, very entertaining. Best for the contest.
Watts Avatar
November 8, 2025 at 12:21 PM
Ha Ha Andrea i think I would have done the same thing a good humorous post Best of luck Cheers Christine
Singh Avatar
November 7, 2025 at 8:47 PM
Funny.Enjoyed reading the poem.Wishing you the best in the contest
Kendrick Avatar
November 7, 2025 at 9:40 AM
Good one, it reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Thanks for sharing the humor today. Sara K
Gorelick Avatar
November 6, 2025 at 12:29 PM
Your poem gave a real lift. Heavy! Elevated my mood, fine narrative.
Sidwell Avatar
November 6, 2025 at 9:25 AM
Such a fun poem! Excellent job at making it humorous without being offensive (which is becoming increasingly difficult). Takes quite the talent!
Dietrich Avatar
November 6, 2025 at 3:09 PM
Thanks for your comment here and on my winter roses haiku
Anaya Avatar
November 5, 2025 at 12:22 PM
Gigantic or elephantine? New word for me! Love the absurdity in your humor. xXhugs
Dietrich Avatar
November 5, 2025 at 9:48 PM
Elephantine mire descriptive of the guy. Haha. Hope I don't meet him on an elevator for real!
James Avatar
November 5, 2025 at 8:44 AM
Think I would of done the same @ out the door lol. Enjoyed your fun poem. Will do well in the contest. Emilia : )
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
November 5, 2025 at 7:02 AM
An amusing anecdote, Charles will be delighted with your entry. Aloha, William.
Dietrich Avatar
November 5, 2025 at 9:48 PM
Thanks. And I sure hope so
DiMino Avatar
November 5, 2025 at 6:36 AM
Unfortunately you were already between floors...the fat man leaned back, and you landed softly in is lap. But seriously, if it can be helped, a healthy diet is better all around, no pun intended. As usual, a great write, Andrea. Good luck in contest.
Buhagiar Avatar
November 5, 2025 at 1:35 AM
Hi Andrea, that was quite humorous. Would have done the same.
Etgen-Baker Avatar
November 4, 2025 at 6:36 PM
wow, that would be shock...loved the humorous ending :-)
Bauer Avatar
November 4, 2025 at 12:17 PM
ha! well done, andrea! i had a similar experience on a swamp boat tour when a family of 3, all obese, were on the same small boat we were on. i kept expecting it to tip over, but nothing bad happened...
Narain Avatar
November 4, 2025 at 11:21 AM
Lol! Nice poem.
Poet Avatar
November 4, 2025 at 9:13 AM
Ha...ha.Enjoyed.Best wishes for the contest.
Poet Avatar
November 4, 2025 at 4:56 AM
You got it, Andrea! You made me laugh! Even though comic isn't my strongest field, I also did this one, but not as good as yours.
Jones Avatar
November 3, 2025 at 11:10 PM
lol! Good one Andrea! You got a giggle from me! I did this one too but humor is not my forte.
George Avatar
November 3, 2025 at 9:38 PM
This is quite interesting and funny. I feel sorry for such people....
Hind Avatar
November 3, 2025 at 8:15 PM
LOL that person must be way bigger than anyone I have ever seen :p
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