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The Makeover - On Top of a Mountain

On Top Of A Mountain 
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stroll down the forest trail
to the edge and inhale
at the sight overlooking perfect nature
held together and prevail

stand by the site of trees and bushes
with lichen hanging over their branches
surrounding the ledge with
ferns, rhododendrons, and tall grass

marvel at a sea of fog covering all
the pine trees that spear outward standing tall
providing natures home
as the mountain walls tower overall

sky exhibit splendor
clouds of different shapes that stir
sun is trying to sneak a peek through
nature waiting anxious for it to enter

a beautiful site standing
viewing off the mountain looking
down for the fog to roll back to view
the world and embrace the living

 
3/25/2015 Rubaiyat Form

                                                On Top Of A Mountain

                                     Lichen hanging from dried branches
                                              Ferns found everywhere
                                               A sea of fog covers all
                                   Pine trees spears outward standing tall
                                         Mountain walls tower over all
                                Sky of splendor, clouds of different shapes
                                        Sun is trying to sneak through
                          A beautiful sight on top of a mountain looking down

                                           12/06/2014   Light Poetry Form

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 4/19/2015 2:07:00 PM
Sorry that I am so late on the congrats, just recently found out the contest was finalized.. Big congrats on your win!!
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Eve Roper
Date: 4/19/2015 2:28:00 PM
Thank you,Robert, Blessings and hugs sir
Date: 4/18/2015 5:35:00 PM
Eve, congratulations on your awesome win. Luv LINDA
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Eve Roper
Date: 4/18/2015 6:01:00 PM
Thank you so much, Linda, for the thoughtful comment and congratulations. Blessings and hugs dear friend Eve
Date: 4/15/2015 11:50:00 AM
Hi Eve: Beautiful exotic splendor as seen on the top of the mountain. Congratulations on your win!
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Eve Roper
Date: 4/15/2015 1:26:00 PM
Thank you, Ralph, for your visit and compliment. Blessings eve
Date: 3/26/2015 1:42:00 PM
Very descriptive work or works..I enjoyed reading both..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for visitung my page..Sara
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Eve Roper
Date: 3/26/2015 6:15:00 PM
Sara, thank you for your inspiring compliment and encouragement. Blessings dear friend Eve
Date: 3/26/2015 8:23:00 AM
Eve, I think both poems are beautiful but there is something about that second one that really spoke to my soul, best of luck in the contest, a perfect 7 for me, and thanks for visiting my makeover poem, still weeping . . .
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Eve Roper
Date: 3/26/2015 6:16:00 PM
Broken Wing, thank you so very much for your inspiring compliment and the best luck in the contest and seven. Blessings dear friend Eve
Date: 3/26/2015 5:54:00 AM
This won the context? It should have...
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Eve Roper
Date: 3/26/2015 6:19:00 PM
Means a lot to me
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Eve Roper
Date: 3/26/2015 6:18:00 PM
Thank you, Hennington, your compliment means to me. Blessings dear poet Eve
Date: 3/25/2015 8:44:00 PM
A wonderful makeover, Eve, just like the original but with more beautiful imagery to enjoy! Hugs, Rhonda
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Eve Roper
Date: 3/26/2015 6:20:00 PM
Thank you, Rhonda, I enjoyed the make over on this poem. Blessings and hugs dear friend Eve
Date: 3/25/2015 8:03:00 PM
wow this is an incredible makeover Eve absolutely wonderful imagery - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx 7 xx
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Eve Roper
Date: 3/25/2015 8:44:00 PM
Thank you, dear friend. Blessings and hugs eve

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