The Love In My Heart Burns In Vain

----I thought I had posted this a while back...guess I didn't. Oops. : ) here it is...couple years old.

When sorry words offer but sadness and pain,
When weary thought drifts into the tides of shame,
When heavy darkness fills my soul,
Freezing last embers upon the coal,
The love in my heart burns in vain

It burns in vain, for I can never quite reach
The paths that entangle, while the demons breach
It burns in vain, for I try so hard for naught
My tears in a frost-bitten muddle—construed and caught

As snowfall sifts ice onto disdain,
As afternoons crawl into midnight shade,
As every mistake has torn me apart,
This foolish soul crushed—bashed from the start
The love in my heart burns in vain

It burns in vain, for reality is but a fret
Knowing tragedy shall befall, though it comes not yet
It burns in vain, for I have hurt you still
As I try to escape the furrowing doubts that kill

So now I cringe, and cower, and remain
So caught in your sorrow as I turn away
So sorry and hateful for what I put you through
For as I falter, you are ever true
The love in our hearts burn in vain

Yet, somehow the yester-embers among the frozen coals return
 Upon the frost-bitten windowpane—somehow they burn
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Hamilton Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 4:31 PM
What a beautiful write Laura, was the 5-4line alternating stanzas planned, or that's just how it flowed? Ending with a couplet is also very striking. You just invented a new form I think, you could call it sonnet/quintain hybrid or something like that.Very original!
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July 19, 2016 at 3:41 AM
Thank you John. Nothing was planned actually. Lol Guess it is what it is, and I am glad you got to read it and to recieve your sweet feedback..<3~Laura
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November 20, 2015 at 8:03 PM
Wow. I can barely put into words how amazing this poem is. This poem could make a book of yours fly off the shelf. This is going into my favs. Well done -JT
Beaufort Avatar
October 10, 2015 at 2:36 PM
You have come a long way!
Breidenthal Avatar
October 11, 2015 at 6:25 PM
Thanks sweetheart! ~Laura
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October 10, 2015 at 2:13 AM
Love is not in vain while it keeps hearts aflame Laura. The way you express the frost of regret, and the sorrow of seperation forces the soul to stand, to demand the truth of love. "Knowing tragedy shall befall, though it comes not yet..." there is tremendous emotional pressure in this poem, yet what is it that's staves this hateful tragedy, could it be love that finds the hidden flame. Your final lines bring feeling back to the fingertips of frostbitten love Laura...J.A.B.
Breidenthal Avatar
October 10, 2015 at 3:25 AM
Yay (: You quoted my favorite line. Thank you for such a sweet and thoughtful review on this poem... ~Laura
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October 8, 2015 at 11:11 PM
Lovely, expressive piece. A masterpiece of words painted by an expert artist. The emotion in the words can be felt easily. Wonderfully done. -becca
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October 9, 2015 at 12:24 AM
Thanks so much, Becca :) ~Laura
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