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The Legend of Rain: a Love Story

(this is a type of quatrain called Swap Quatrain, wherein the fourth line of each stanza is actually the first line, just swapped around) Another Time, long long ago, there was no Rain; there was no Snow. No reason was there, and no rhyme long long ago, another Time. A desert only, lifeless land - boulders, pebbles, grains of sand; hot and windswept, barren, lonely lifeless land; a desert only. From Sky was tossed one day, a seed onto this land so much in need, whose dreariness would soon be lost. One day a seed from Sky was tossed. In Sun’s bright heat, the small seed grew until an egg it changed into. It needed only moisture sweet. The small seed grew in Sun’s bright heat. Sky clapped loud sound; a bird appeared. The egg was pulsing as she neared. White feathers fluttered to the ground. A bird appeared; Sky clapped loud sound. As Rain came down. . . A sudden change! The bird turned into something strange - A lovely girl with feathered gown! A sudden change as Rain came down. With Rain’s soft fall, the egg had burst. Emerging from the egg came first One horse, then two. Fantastical! The egg had burst with Rain’s soft fall. The horses grew beneath big Sun. They thrived; with Rain they were as one. Along with her, like Wind, they’d run. Beneath big Sun, the horses grew. Twin beasts and Rain, that dry land’s three became a new world’s trinity. And with them, green and springtime came. That dry land’s three: twin beasts and Rain. With so much spring, with Rain’s pure grace came poetry into that place. Bright flowers bloomed when she would sing with Rain’s pure grace, with so much spring. Variety, the needful thing, Rain prayed out loud for Sky to bring. And so was born for her to see: the needful thing, Variety! Then came down Snow from up above. This counterpart was Rain’s true love. When white Snow ebbed, sweet Rain would flow. From up above, then came down Snow. Sweet Rain, white Snow, atop each horse, still ride the land and set the course of when their seasons come and go. Atop each horse, sweet Rain, white Snow. By Andrea Dietrich Inspired by A Rambling Poet's Contest: "Rain: the Story"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 7/25/2017 9:33:00 PM
A beautiful and enchanting write Andrea, ... Hugs
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Date: 1/16/2011 7:43:00 PM
Congratulations on your super win in the contest, Andrea. Wonderful work! Love, Annalise
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Date: 1/14/2011 9:17:00 AM
Congratulations Andrea on your win in A Rambling Poet's contest "Rain,The Story". Love, Carol
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Date: 1/13/2011 12:49:00 PM
Congratulations on your fantastic win in Constance's contest, Andrea! Thanks for the kind comments! Love, Annalise
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Date: 1/13/2011 11:33:00 AM
Hey, the "swap quatrain" concept is new to me, Andrea, and I like the way you presented this lovely story. Congratulations! Carolyn
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Date: 1/13/2011 9:51:00 AM
Very imaginative and beautifully presented. Well worth top honors. love, Joyce
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Date: 1/13/2011 8:34:00 AM
A beautiful poem, Andrea...and you made it even more difficult using this difficult form !! Well done!!
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Date: 1/13/2011 6:29:00 AM
Congratulations on the third place win in the contest of Constance, Andrea
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Date: 1/13/2011 4:47:00 AM
Nice going Andrea..I love the idea of the "swap" quatrain...congrats. BG
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Date: 1/13/2011 3:15:00 AM
well woven sory that truly hypnotizes, andrea.. cheers for the happy win in this contest! :) nette
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Date: 1/12/2011 8:59:00 PM
Many Congrats Andrea on big win with this creative verse.Best wishes/Luv - Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 1/12/2011 8:21:00 PM
Congrats Andrea on your wonderful win in the Rain Story contest with this exquisite entry my friend.. a well deserved top spot my friend with luv..
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Date: 1/12/2011 7:59:00 PM
An amazing write Andrea. Lots of congratulations for this win.
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Date: 1/5/2011 8:05:00 AM
Andrea, it looks as if you have a winner here. Here, a winner it looks you have Andrea.
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Date: 12/31/2010 4:58:00 PM
Very pretty, well done, put this in a book? I can see the illustrations. I admire how you rhyme so well, without a hint of any stretching for a word. So natural.
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Date: 12/31/2010 4:37:00 PM
it seems that anew would begin when new things are discovered in nature itself. this girl must have been beautiful with her feathered gown. i love rain, who doesn't..it cleanses the soul(: ~Always&Forever Lynette
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Date: 12/30/2010 9:31:00 PM
I especially like the last line. "Apples of the Sun" is borrowed from a poem by Yeats. Yours in Verse Matthew Anish
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Date: 12/30/2010 9:31:00 PM
I especially like the last line. "Apples of the Sun" is borrowed from a poem by Yeats. Yours in Verse Matthew Anish
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Date: 12/29/2010 12:20:00 AM
Wow this is so sophisticated Andrea, just love it, love the form also. Harry
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Date: 12/28/2010 2:22:00 PM
Not only a love story,but a new mythology seeding here. Good write.
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Date: 12/28/2010 7:54:00 AM
very "heavenly" beautiful, andrea!enough said... bwst winning wishes in paula's contest.. whoooT!:) hugggs, nette
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Date: 12/28/2010 6:44:00 AM
Pure beauty! Andrea! jimbo
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Date: 12/28/2010 6:29:00 AM
This is brilliant, I loved it! especially the third stanza "A desert only, lifeless land - boulders, pebbles, grains of sand; hot and windswept, barren, lonely lifeless land; a desert only." something about it was so powerful! I look forward to reading more of your work! Thank you for your comment on floating Crystal ~x~
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Date: 12/28/2010 5:59:00 AM
Excellent story of Rain you have penned Andrea.Liked it .
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Date: 12/28/2010 5:46:00 AM
What a story...just way to cool...now where did you say you were keeping all your trophies and awards? lol...love, BG
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