The Keyhole

Just like her favorite character Alice, she dresses, wears a key around her neck. She has read of a keyhole that holds heaven on the other side of the door. A young girl named Cassy sits bored by a riverbank. She looks into reflecting waters, twirling her long tresses, as she fiddles with the key. It falls into the river and she jumps in after it. Swimming for what seems forever, she lifts her head. At first blurry swishes of gardens and trees are all she sees. Then the picture is clear; around her stars of silver. The other side of the door is shimmering ever so bright! Baptism took place Let go the crutch that holds back The child she flows 7/11/22

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Susan Lawrence

Date: 7/19/2022 8:14:00 AM

Wow, so very beautiful Ayana ! I love the nuance..the passage of time and the water renewal here. Captivating. Blessings, Susan :)

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/19/2022 12:22:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed Susan! It's quite a treat to here from such an accomplished poet and visual artist. ~Anaya ox

Michael Tor

Date: 7/18/2022 7:55:00 PM

Ayana you kept me glue to the words to find the ending of this Marvelous piece of Poetry. Wow! Thank you for your effort in writing and sharing such a lovely write. God bless you...

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/19/2022 12:24:00 PM

God bless you, Michael. I think I'm really getting the hang of it! ~Anaya ;)

Yolanda Nicholsen

Date: 7/17/2022 8:48:00 PM

beautiful piece enjoyed reading this

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/17/2022 8:52:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed Yolanda!

Harry Horsman

Date: 7/13/2022 8:36:00 PM

Wow, love the haibun form, Anaya, and you truly create a deep and wonderful poem, here.

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/17/2022 9:20:00 AM

Harry, I'm pleased you enjoyed it. It is a nice form, a first paragraph of your short story...

Ann Foster

Date: 7/13/2022 11:58:00 AM

On the other side... sometimes it is lovely. Sometimes it is unreal and just a dream. Great write. Well done. Ann

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/17/2022 9:17:00 AM

A state of mind, perhaps? Ann, thank you kindly. Have a nice day!

Michael Tor

Date: 7/12/2022 9:55:00 PM

Nicely written Anaya...

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/17/2022 9:17:00 AM

Thank you, Michael

Sam Kauffman

Date: 7/12/2022 10:02:00 AM

Depth bathed in vivid experiential metaphor - a poem drawn in new perspectives, Anaya! Best wishes for the contest with this wildly unique haibun! Blessings.

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/13/2022 10:24:00 AM

Haibun a first for me! Hands on is how I work with unfamiliar forms, and it seems to work well. Most of my learning experience is impromptu. Thank you, Sam! Best

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 7/12/2022 1:39:00 AM

A great fable. Loved it.

I Am Anaya
Date: 7/13/2022 10:26:00 AM

I took a fable short I wrote and condensed it into this haibum form. Thank you, Voctor!