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The Hill

It all came crashing down around us Someone had to fire the first shot He wasn’t happy You killed him, that’s all wrong The first shot is always a warning, it’s war etiquette So strange, mother would have loved him, he had manners God, she would say, you eat like an animal, use your knife and fork Football mum, need to rush, big game today, come and watch us, it’s life and death They wanted our piece of the hill We wanted their piece of the hill Rush, rush, take the hill, how many bullets can you kill He wants to talk to them, Mr etiquette You would be proud of him mum So Polite They shot him like a dog Rush, rush, take the hill, how many bullets can you kill We killed them all It’s now our hill Did you see me, mum, did you see me score Were you too busy with your other son..

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Date: 5/23/2024 9:51:00 AM
Hello Paul, What a powerful and wonderful exploration of the complexities of human conflict and the consequences of violence. I loved the word picture of the chaos and tragedy of war, juxtaposed with moments of tender reflection and longing for familial connection. The contrast between the brutality of battle and the memories of a mother's love creates a deeply moving narrative that is touching long after reading. Your ability to capture such raw emotion is truly commendable. -Blessings, Daniel
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Paul Bell
Date: 5/25/2024 6:42:00 AM
Families at war within war.
Date: 5/22/2024 1:54:00 PM
there's usually a sombre message contained in your poems, beneath the black humour..this is a sobering one; you write often on war, do you have links with the military?
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Paul Bell
Date: 5/23/2024 7:11:00 AM
Used to play soldiers, then they took my rifle away from me. lol
Date: 5/22/2024 10:33:00 AM
Not seen you write a melancholic poem.. this one is deep and emotive and that is a sad ending..
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Paul Bell
Date: 5/23/2024 7:12:00 AM
I know, need to cheer myself up with something funny now.

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