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The Haunted House

I drove around the countryside, one wet and stormy day; as lightning flashed, I realised I'd truly lost my way - I saw a house and went to ask directions from the folk; I'll tell you what then happened, but you may think it's a joke... The door was open, just a crack; I knocked, then went inside; the stench was terrible, just like an animal had died. Huge flies were buzzing all around an ancient photograph; as footsteps echoed through the house, I thought I heard a laugh. The front door slammed - the laugh again - I shivered then with fright; the door was stuck, I couldn't leave, and guessed I'd have to fight. 'I - I mean no harm,' I stammered, then, 'I'm sorry to intrude -' I wondered would my story hold verisimilitude. The voice that boomed was deafening, and curses filled the air; my heart was thumping, hairs on end. I felt an evil stare. The stench was growing...footsteps neared... a shadow on the wall! I trembled like a frightened child, and staggered from the hall. I ran upstairs; from room to room, I wandered, panting hard; and cried, despairing at the sight: the window frames were barred. I spun around and saw a face - such malice in its glare; I knew I'd have to leave, somehow - or else I'd die right there. I sprang towards him, ready fists; he towered at the door; I paused, then like a bull I charged... and he was there no more! I slipped and tumbled down the stairs, the door was open wide; I hurled his photograph and, chased by flies, I rushed outside. Sponsor- Dear Heart Contest- The Haunted House written 18th August 2018

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Date: 9/16/2018 8:07:00 PM
I'm a little late, Jack, great imagery and story. Big congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve~`*
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Date: 9/5/2018 11:33:00 AM
Jack, congratulations on your win in my contest with this great storytelling poem, you had me hooked from word one, well done !
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Date: 9/1/2018 7:43:00 PM
You already know I faved this outstanding poem Jack. Congratulations on your win. It is a top winnerfor me! : )
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Date: 9/1/2018 12:40:00 PM
This is terrific, Jack! Great story you have narrated so well. Congrats on your win!
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Date: 8/20/2018 4:51:00 PM
You make an excellent narrator, Jack! You sure brought your haunted house to life! Best regards // paul
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Date: 8/20/2018 2:21:00 PM
EXCELLENT Jack! I hope this is a top winner for you. This impressive piece is going into my faves my friend! : )
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Date: 8/19/2018 3:20:00 PM
Loved your take on the poem. Truly an eerie tale and nicely written!
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Date: 8/19/2018 1:28:00 PM
wow, you really went with it!! PUt your whole self into this one and I was thinking maybe you would have a twist like something funny at the end, but you made it a real horror show!! Very visual and so cool that at the end, that escape was made!
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Date: 8/18/2018 9:51:00 PM
Wow! Jack, your poem of rhythmic intrigue is enthralling and eerie. Your building suspense really captured me and your last two lines gave me a huge sigh of relief.. whew! A fantastic write my friend.. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan
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Date: 8/18/2018 7:10:00 PM
eerily beautiful, jack.. am not going there!...huggs
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Date: 8/18/2018 4:41:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your work. Reads like a good contender for the contest. Thanks for the visits to my page. Sara
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Date: 8/18/2018 10:19:00 AM
Great rhythm and rhyme, Jack. I was there from lightning flash right to the frantic exit!
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