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The Fourth Floor of Nowhere

In restless winds and in shadows dark over a sweeping plain of wheat so fair a crumbling homestead stands against fate with a wandering staircase going nowhere. Warily, I clutch the creaky bannister willing my feet to climb treacherous steps up to the floor of Four...then I hesitate for my spirit is overwhelmed and bereft. Herein lies a faded, neglected nursery a drooping jack-in-the-box with a frozen smile a broken man-in-the-moon clock hangs limp with a chilling breeze moaning all the while. Thunderclouds blacken the distant horizon like time that cloaks events from long ago I do not possess the keys to unlock mysteries but I entered the floor of nowhere..this, I know. Written on 9/5/2020

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Date: 10/1/2020 7:31:00 AM
Enjoyed this one, congrats Laura on placing this time!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 10/1/2020 8:57:00 AM
Thank you, John! I appreciate this. :)
Date: 9/27/2020 10:08:00 AM
wow, so mysterious. You took this challenge in a really interesting direction out there in a field with this old house. I hope you get a win, Laura.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/27/2020 11:46:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea. It didn’t place, but that’s okay. Glad you liked it :)
Date: 9/14/2020 12:25:00 PM
Laura, you have written a step-by-step growing sense of mystery and dread with your evocative adjectives and adverbs. The sense of wariness and hesitation is palpable. The details you provide with the jack-in-the-box and the man-in-the-moon give the reader a sense of being right there with you. Expertly done, I wish you all the best in Craig's contest. Virtual hugs ~ John
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/14/2020 2:57:00 PM
Thank you, John! I’m so happy you enjoyed this poem and appreciate your kind comments! :)
Date: 9/11/2020 11:58:00 AM
- Sounds as you walk through time in an old abandoned house - A slightly horrible feeling and poetic great poem, Laura :) - Nice to see you ... have a lovely weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/11/2020 1:11:00 PM
Thank you for your comments, Anne-Lise! I appreciate it very much! :)
Date: 9/8/2020 2:31:00 PM
Deftly described, Laura. I got goosebumps reading it... Reminiscent of some of Dickens' work. Fine penning! :) gw
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/11/2020 1:10:00 PM
Thank you, Gershon! I truly appreciate your comments! :)
Date: 9/8/2020 4:56:00 AM
A brilliant write, Laura--quite creative, original thoughts dwell on the fourth floor of your poem--wonderfully done.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/8/2020 6:42:00 AM
Thank you, Vijay! So glad you enjoyed this! :)
Date: 9/7/2020 10:38:00 AM
Your poem is rich in its rhymes and darkness, Laura. Emotional and physical angst spills with potent dread and mystery from your creative pen. Secrets in gloomy metaphoric beauty and suspense so wonderfully expressed. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you, dear poetess.. ~Susan
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/7/2020 9:57:00 PM
Thank you so much, Susan, for your generous comments! I appreciate that you liked this one! :)
Date: 9/6/2020 4:52:00 PM
Nice...I like how you wrote it...suspense and silent imagery
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/6/2020 5:08:00 PM
Thanks, Arturo! I’m glad that you liked this! :)
Date: 9/5/2020 8:18:00 PM
Oh my, this is chilling and creepy. Feels like a ghost story, as I can almost hear the moaning of the wind. Yes, it is almost that time of year again. Halloween. You paint such an eerie scene, with your words. ~ Brandy
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/5/2020 8:39:00 PM
Thanks, Brandy. Glad you liked it! :)
Date: 9/5/2020 7:19:00 PM
...very interesting write...its inner reads as: 'no-where <--> now-here'...garbage once treasure.....stan sand
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/5/2020 8:38:00 PM
Thanks, Stan! Love your take on this! :)
Date: 9/5/2020 3:46:00 PM
Hello Lauram yes it seems this house has a mystery to a room in the 4th floor that goes nowhere. Enjoy your evening my friend.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 9/7/2020 11:23:00 AM
Your welcome Laura. Enjoy your day my friend.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/5/2020 3:50:00 PM
Thank you, Darlene! :)
Date: 9/5/2020 2:39:00 PM
Interesting writing Laura, really good imagery and fine insightful thoughts too. Take care and keep safe, Blessings,Gordon
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/5/2020 2:44:00 PM
Thanks for commenting, Gordon. Glad you liked it! :)

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