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In the heart of the Loire valley
Where the river wends its way
A young dreamer lured by nature
Free of care played music gay
 
As he wandered along footpaths
Playing lightly on his flute
By the vineyards in abundance
And the orchards full of fruit.
 
It was there that he encountered 
A fair maiden and her art
She was painting on her canvas; 
With a smile she stole his heart.
 
From then on they met in secret
Near the rolling hills in green
Where the flowers looked in wonder.
They were happy and serene.
 
They made love and plans together
Spoke of dreams they meant to share
Looked at life through coloured lenses
And built castles in the air.
 
Then one night a storm erupted
Unexpected in mid May,
Raging waters in a frenzy
Came and took her life away.
 
All his dreams were quickly shattered
And the castle tumbled down
For his Queen of Hearts had left him
Broken king without a crown.

In the ruins of the castle
He was left to sit and grieve
And his friends who came to visit
All were kindly asked to leave.
 
Days and nights passed undetected                     
As he dreamed of raven hair
On his lips he felt her kisses
Woke to find she was not there. 
 
Then one day, he rose with vigor    
Once again he built the dream
Made a castle even finer                
Standing stately by their stream.
 
And the people came to marvel
At the wonder of this sight
For there in the very center
Was her statue gleaming bright.
 
Now the castle so resplendent
Stands a testament to love
Which will never wane or wither
Conquers death and soars above. 

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26th August, 2015
Paul Callus & Eileen Manassian
Contest: Partner Up 
Sponsor: Shadow Hamilton

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 12/31/2015 1:34:00 PM
I was sure I commented on this amazing poem, I was like 100% sure, I said I must be going crazy, is IMPOSSIBLE I didn't comment on this!!! Now I am laughing at myself cause I a find I am somewhat sane! I did COMMENT, but on Pauls page!! LOL OK maybe I am not sane, never the less a pleasure to read this one twice! Hugs and handshakes! :)
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Date: 9/9/2015 1:16:00 AM
Wonderful collab Eileen and Paul! Congrats on superb win!What i see is all love stories ending tragically in fore-walls of these castles yet love never wanes/withers !!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/9/2015 2:00:00 AM
Yes, my dear Dr Upma....Love must love on...Thanks for your wonderful visit. Hugs, my dear...
Date: 9/8/2015 2:57:00 PM
Hi Eileen! Just realized that the results are out! Very pleased with the outcome:) Congratulations!! You make a great writing partner:) Hugs ~~ paul
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/9/2015 2:01:00 AM
I did send you a message on your post below....If you check, dear. :) Yes....I'm very happy with the results. I know that we had some strong contenders. Anytime...Paul...Anytime...I'm here. Hugs
Date: 9/8/2015 11:41:00 AM
Dropping back with my congrats Eileen and Paul:-) hugs Jan xx
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/9/2015 2:27:00 AM
Thanks, sweetie....Hugs! :)
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/8/2015 2:58:00 PM
Many txs Jan:) hugs // paul
Date: 9/8/2015 8:48:00 AM
Eileen,, Congratulations on your - Partner up - contest win. **SKAT**
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/9/2015 1:59:00 AM
Thanks, Skat....Much appreciated, dear. Hugs
Date: 9/7/2015 11:44:00 PM
Eileen, you and Paul an outstanding collab.Congratulations on your win:-) Alexis
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/8/2015 2:59:00 PM
Thank you for the congrats and support, Alexis! All the best:) // paul
Date: 9/7/2015 9:14:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Eileen & Paul! Hugs Eve
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/8/2015 3:00:00 PM
Thank you Eve! Hugs // paul
Date: 9/1/2015 4:44:00 PM
Hi Eileen! I'm paying you a visit to thank you publicly for accepting to collaborate with me in writing for Shadow's contest. As always, it has been a lovely experience. You never fail to rise to the occasion! Hugs // paul
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/7/2015 11:45:00 PM
Hey Paul....We got second place!! :) Isn't that something. Thanks for the invitation to collab with you. ANYTIME! :) You and I just write so well together. Hugs
Date: 8/27/2015 1:40:00 PM
WOW, Pauls one of the best poets on here to collaborate with. Both of you did beautifully. A pleasure to read... LINDA
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Paul Callus
Date: 9/1/2015 4:39:00 PM
Thank you Linda:) You are very generous:) // paul
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/27/2015 2:03:00 PM
:) He is a wonderful poet and friend, Linda. :) Thanks for the visit dear....I appreciate it. HUGS
Date: 8/27/2015 9:54:00 AM
Wow wow wow! This is beyond amazing! You both did a tremendous job! Hugs Rick.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/27/2015 9:55:00 AM
:) Thanks, Rick. I'm so glad that you liked this piece. Hugs
Date: 8/26/2015 4:37:00 PM
Thanks for visiting my poem and commenting. This write is B E A U T I F U L so well penned by both of you ~~
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/27/2015 9:56:00 AM
Thank you, dear Broken Wings. I'm so glad to have your affirmation. Hugs
Date: 8/26/2015 3:05:00 PM
What a lovely beautiful but sad story Eileen a Paul a lovely collaboration - good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/26/2015 3:07:00 PM
Thanks, sweetie...yes, Life is sad at times. Some things last forever. :) Hugs
Date: 8/26/2015 2:48:00 PM
A lovely story and collab. Quite sad, a lost love. Beautifully done...good luck Tim
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/26/2015 2:52:00 PM
Thanks, Tim. Paul send me something he'd been working on and asked if I'd collab with me. :) I was pleased as pumpkin pie. I love writing with him. Glad you liked this piece. Hugs

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