The Flame We Lost

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The wind would blow alluring strands of your soul, tickling seductively, weaving like a candle flame lyric, where it danced provocatively. You fondled the depth whirling to the surface edge taking a little hope with you; then flew away. You cannot ask and then leave me brittle. You were quicksand that made me sink. But the thunder that's a part of me has shut the door to doubts, fears, and impulsive desires to set me free. 6/18/2018

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Susan Ashley

Date: 6/22/2018 11:01:00 PM

Your poem is breathtaking in its style and imagery Eve. Every line sparkles with emotional depth and beauty Congratulations on your wonderful win my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Susan Gentry

Date: 6/22/2018 7:21:00 PM

Congratulations on your win! Awesome six lines. A fave for me. Excellent.

Probir Gupta

Date: 6/22/2018 12:23:00 AM

Congratulations, Eve on your nice placement in the contest ... powerfully written six lines ...

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/20/2018 7:01:00 PM

I see you've drawn a comment from 'White Wolf' as well as from me, Gershon Wolf … And now it's 'Howlin' Wolf's' turn: Aa-oooooo! Congrats! :)gw

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/20/2018 6:55:00 PM

- A skilled and great 6 line poem, from you Eve :) - It must have been difficult to judge, I think everyone is amazing, with different themes - Congratulations on a well deserved 2nd place in the contest :) - hugs // Anne -Lise :)

Edward Ibeh

Date: 6/20/2018 4:40:00 PM

Loved this! Congratulations on your fine win, Eve!:-)

Eve Roper
Date: 6/20/2018 6:32:00 PM

Thank you Edward, Hugs Eve ~ ‘ *

Silent One

Date: 6/20/2018 3:41:00 PM

Always sad when the flame burns out.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Eve Roper
Date: 6/20/2018 6:32:00 PM

Thank you Silent One, for my placement ,I am very honored Hugs Eve ~ ‘ *

White Wolf

Date: 6/19/2018 12:52:00 PM

You are a chef with words as your recipes, herbs and spices - and your secret ingredient? Is spellbinding poetry! Love your dishes! But this course is so succinct and yet, so filling!

Eve Roper
Date: 6/20/2018 6:31:00 PM

Thank you White Wolf, you made me blush Hugs Eve ~ ‘ *