Jan Allison Poet Light Verse

The Final Push - Brevity Contest

I lay on the bed puffing and panting
Couldn’t get comfortable no matter how hard I tried
I twisted and turned,  oh how my stomach ached
When will this pain be over  - I can hardly take any more
With one last push  ……
I got the zipper of my new jeans done up!

Brevity Contest – Sponsor Casarah Nance

07~07~15

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Poet Destroyer A July 15, 2015 at 1:38 AM Jan, Congratulations ~LINDA~ Jan Allison July 15, 2015 at 4:30 AM Thanks Linda:-) Hugs Jan x

Skat A July 14, 2015 at 12:04 AM Jan, Congratulations on your sweet win. Love SKAT Jan Allison July 14, 2015 at 4:21 AM Thanks Skat:-) Hugs Jan x

Olusegun Arowolo July 13, 2015 at 5:23 PM Brilliant piece, Jan.Congrats on your well deserved win in this contest.kudos yo you great friend and poet.And thanks for your comments on my works Jan Allison July 13, 2015 at 5:24 PM thanks for dropping by with your lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Lycia Harding July 13, 2015 at 4:23 PM Hahaha! Were you in my dressing room this morning?? Love it, Jan. Congrats on your win. xoxo Jan Allison July 13, 2015 at 4:27 PM lol Hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos July 13, 2015 at 3:43 PM Congratulations! Number Won! Cheers!!! Jan Allison July 13, 2015 at 4:03 PM I'm so glad Cas liked it Judy the win has made my day brighter:-) hugs Jan xx

Abdul Malik Mandani July 13, 2015 at 1:25 PM Now this is what I call 'Brevity with a twist". You should be on the top! Jan Allison July 13, 2015 at 1:28 PM I was so delighted Cas liked it Abdul:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong July 13, 2015 at 12:17 PM Congratulations on your first place in this contest Jan! I knew it would be a top winner. Jan Allison July 13, 2015 at 12:32 PM Thanks Connie I am so glad Cas liked it:-) hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez July 13, 2015 at 11:30 AM Yes! An awesome win! Congrats, Jan! hugs! Jan Allison July 13, 2015 at 11:42 AM Thanks so much Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper July 13, 2015 at 9:43 AM Awesome win, hugs eve Jan Allison July 13, 2015 at 11:42 AM Thanks so much Eve I had fun with this one:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance July 13, 2015 at 8:38 AM oh so hilarious! I laughed out loud when I read this entry! Grats on first place ;-) Jan Allison July 13, 2015 at 11:41 AM Oh wow thanks Cas you have made my day:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley July 12, 2015 at 9:26 PM Its a girl! Who writes great poetry! Viv x Jan Allison July 13, 2015 at 3:05 AM aww thanks Mr Viv ***blushes*** I'm far from a girl but thanks for the kind words:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus July 8, 2015 at 5:20 PM Enjoyed your final twist, Jan:) Initially a few ideas passed through my mind!! gl in the contest. hugs // paul Jan Allison July 8, 2015 at 5:27 PM Cas wanted a twist so i hope she likes my take on the theme:-) hugs jan xx

James Fraser July 8, 2015 at 2:16 PM Not a challenge I've endured, but I guess many have. Good luck in the contest Jan, hugs//James xx Jan Allison July 8, 2015 at 2:18 PM Thanks for your continued support James I hope cas likes the twist at the end:-) hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez July 8, 2015 at 7:31 AM hahaah! too cute...the first line was kind of hot...then second line got me wondering ...3rd line got me sympathizing...4th and 5th lines...wow! I'm witcha! lol! I know Cas would love this... hugs! Jan Allison July 8, 2015 at 7:34 AM Thanks Kim - I hope Cas likes the twist at the end:-) Hugs Jan xx

Njeri Hunjeri July 7, 2015 at 8:14 PM Lol, the end got me. Good one. All the best in the contest. N thank u so much for helping me the other day. I will always remember that. Jan Allison July 8, 2015 at 1:42 AM Thanks Njeri and my pleasure to help:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos July 7, 2015 at 6:50 PM Been there done that but never actually succeeded in getting that zipper all the way up to the top! One KQQL scenario here....Bravo! Jan Allison July 8, 2015 at 1:40 AM Thanks Judy:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper July 7, 2015 at 6:47 PM You really had me wondering what you were doing a 7 hugs eve Jan Allison July 8, 2015 at 1:40 AM Thanks Eve Cas wanted a twist i hope I pulled it off lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Jerry T Curtis July 7, 2015 at 6:37 PM This for sure is the 8th wonder of the word, lol Jan Allison July 7, 2015 at 6:46 PM ha ha ha:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France July 7, 2015 at 6:31 PM Jan, ha ha, this is so funny, been there, those darn skinny jeans, wonderful 7 and thanks for visiting my poems, Gods Love. . . and Spiritual Awareness Jan Allison July 7, 2015 at 6:33 PM Thanks for dropping by I just hope it is what Cas is looking for:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. July 7, 2015 at 5:48 PM Jan, this is good one. lt ain't so easy putting on your favorite jeans. Believe me I know lol. Good luck in the contest:-)Alexis Jan Allison July 7, 2015 at 5:51 PM I have a pair of jeans that are over 25 years old - they are too big for me at the moment:-( hugs Jan xx

John Lawless July 7, 2015 at 5:39 PM Good one Jan....ain't easy giving up on those favorite jeans.. Jan Allison July 7, 2015 at 5:41 PM It's not an issue I have John just had to go with the flow of my pen and this is the result lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Frederic Parker July 7, 2015 at 5:02 PM Comes a time when one has to decide to buy a bigger size.. Jan Allison July 7, 2015 at 5:09 PM I'm actually continuing to lose weight with stress in my life Frederic so I do not have this issue myself:-( hugs Jan xx