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As Martin gazed at the woman, he believed her to be a nymph. The pipes continued with their haunting melody. "I’d never thought such exotic places existed…” "It must be a special day for you." She smiled. It was as if a flower suddenly blossomed out Or a nestling had stretched its wings And embarked on its maiden, glorious flight. "It's my twenty-fifth birthday." She nodded. "Everything about this place is magic.” “Why don’t you join me for a swim?" Some instinct told Martin to be careful. “Come away with me," he implored. "You don’t know what you’re asking. I can never leave this place. It would mean death to me." Suddenly, he heard the screech of the kestrel. The flute went on with its haunting, menacing melody. “You must go quickly. “ she said. But Martin lost all reason. He lifted his gun and shot. The kestrel fell dead at his feet. The sound of the pipes was foreboding. Fog descended on the now turbulent lake. Heavy wind began to blow. He left reluctantly, cursing his luck. As he left the cliff, He felt some force throw him to the ground Under the shade of a mighty tree. Someone was shaking him up. It was the young woman urging him up, Wiping a wound on his forehead. He looked at her in awe, especially her yellow dress. He searched for the opening on the cliff but found none. “Let’s go to have something to drink,” she said. He smiled with elation. Above the trees, golden orioles chirped melodies of love.

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Date: 11/20/2024 7:16:00 AM
A happy ending, I love this, Victor:)
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Date: 11/15/2024 7:31:00 PM
The whole story was hinting that something ominous was going to happen. The twist at the end was not expected. Your alluring nature descriptions are so very characteristic of most of your poems. The scene on the cliff and Martin's meeting with the young lady portended danger. But glad, the meeting ended in a blooming romance. A great tale, dear Victor!
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Date: 11/15/2024 6:21:00 PM
An interesting tale- kinda scary up unto the end...
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Date: 11/15/2024 3:33:00 AM
A beautiful conclusion to your story dear Victor. A truly mesmerizing tale, blending mystery, nature, and the allure of the unknown. The haunting melody of the pipes and the vivid imagery—blossoming flowers, kestrels, turbulent lakes—create a sensory-rich narrative that feels both ethereal and foreboding. The emotional push and pull between Martin and the enigmatic woman is captivating. Very well written...Hugs
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Date: 11/14/2024 5:53:00 PM
The ending to this sweet saga is very satisfying and lovely, Victor. It was nice to see it end happily. The golden olriole added mystery and enchantment to the tale. :)
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Date: 11/14/2024 5:42:00 PM
A lovely ending to Martin's story, I’ve enjoyed reading each chapter very much… Beryl
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Date: 11/14/2024 12:42:00 PM
Such a romantic ending Victor. Glad it ended the way it did he found true love. Such a lovely story told by you. With a happy ending. Thank you for sharing I enjoyed the three part series my friend...
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Date: 11/14/2024 12:43:00 PM
PS lovely picture...
Date: 11/14/2024 12:16:00 PM
- Really a special day for, Martin - An exciting and entertaining story, Victor - Looking forward to the continuation :) - hugs
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