The Elder

In the shadow of this tree, 
Judas mapped his misery, 

But saw no finger-post, save one: 
A beckoning oblivion.

So up he climbed, with labored breath, 
To where he could devise his death.

The twisted tree, by time distressed, 
Would ratify his wretchedness, 

And let him fall — his loss complete, 
The seamless sky his winding sheet.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Lowe Avatar
April 14, 2025 at 8:44 AM
Profound! So much awareness messaging is canvased by God's sage trees throughout the seasons. Love the depth conveyed in this masterful poetic style. Thanks for the share, Alan. One. Peace and love.
Delaney-Barron Avatar
March 19, 2025 at 4:07 PM
This set of couplets and your extraordinary gift of rhyme really stands out as something special here in Poetry Soup. Glad I discovered your work today!
Ireland Avatar
March 20, 2025 at 2:50 PM
Thank you. It's a versification of an ancient belief that Judas hanged himself on an elder tree - rather unlikely in my opinion, as such trees don't (as far as I know) grow to any great size. Incidentally, two mouthfuls of elderberry syrup were all I needed to cure my "Covid cough"!
Cresswell Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 10:06 PM
Judas has always been a problem for me in that I think he might have been a scape goat. Your poem has opened up my mind and shook out that conundrum.
Wood Avatar
June 13, 2017 at 5:49 PM
Another jewel! You are very talented!
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