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The Detective Or Great Expectations Or Not

The spiral staircase made her high heels sing. How happy she felt now that it was spring. She smelled the bouquet of fragrant roses She would marry him; offer her posies. Up she climbed the stairs to their hiding place, Her face shining, lovely so full of grace. The sleuth would ruin such a lovely face, He knew well, her divorce was fine as lace. From here the city churches pierced the mist. Viewing the scene; anger he couldn't resist. He had done his job; got all evidence, She had money; a place of residence. It was time to get paid and enjoy life He had no thought of making her his wife. Took his fee, opened the door, and watched her stare. He closed it, and, now smiling, crossed the square. He'd disappear, went to another town Found other women, but avoid renown. 10 syllables per line, hopefully.

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Date: 7/2/2023 10:59:00 PM
What a story/poem Victor most intriguing, I love the picture that came into mind of the lady on the spiral staircase that made her heels sing and the city churches piercing the mist, wonderful expressions. Belle
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Date: 6/29/2023 12:29:00 AM
Interesting and rhyming good, but not sure what did he do to her, left her or something worse?
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Date: 6/28/2023 9:57:00 PM
An interesting twist at the end of this masterfully crafted poem. Love your stories, Victor.
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Date: 6/28/2023 4:54:00 PM
I love the sentence,"The spiral staircase made her high heels sing." Great verse my friend
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Date: 6/28/2023 3:12:00 PM
Was it he that deserted Miss Habersham. I can ask? but it must be the mixture of two classics.
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Date: 6/28/2023 1:20:00 PM
gosh, this is sure unique. I quite like it, Victor. I saw another poem about Great Expectations today. is there a challenge I don't know about??
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 6/28/2023 8:54:00 PM
No contests in view.
Date: 6/28/2023 12:18:00 PM
You are so imaginative and creative, makes for interesting poems, love it
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Date: 6/28/2023 10:33:00 AM
Great imagery and as I was expecting from you, a twist in the plot!
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Date: 6/28/2023 8:24:00 AM
I love your ability to write such fabulous stories, the twist at the end was most unexpected:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 6/28/2023 5:56:00 AM
It wasn't love after all. So sad thieves like him thrive on misfortunes of others. A life lesson you convey, Victor.
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Date: 6/28/2023 5:53:00 AM
Sad, her dreams were shattered. Never expected the story would have such an unexpected twist ! Powerfully told, dear Victor.
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Date: 6/28/2023 3:34:00 AM
Sad tale, but too often true. Well told poetically!
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Date: 6/28/2023 3:27:00 AM
Your exquisite verse possesses an exuberant vitality. Masterfully executed, this inspirational composition delves into the inherent foolishness that pervades humanity. In a lamentable sequence, one succumbed to insatiable greed while the other, tragically deceived, fell victim to their nefarious machinations. Alas, such reprehensible conduct is regrettably prevalent. May your poetic opus serve as a clarion call, rousing slumbering souls from their complacency. Your craftsmanship, dear Victor, is truly exceptional.
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Date: 6/28/2023 1:35:00 AM
- He stepped a little over the line ... and disappeared ... - Excellently written, Victor :) - hugs
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