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The Deserted Girl

Looking himself in the mirror He can feel that someone waits for him Beside the lake wearing her black attire Holding sky in countenance Ocean in her blue gaze He wishes to kiss the cloud He keeps looking at while she stands still He is confused but stares at the small hill Lovely story under a white shroud Bleeding tears in eyes She stands a statue kissing Her own psychic salt A heavy rock on his heart The girl he has deserted ___________________________________ 01/09/2016 for: Challenge - Write One – Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Broken Wings

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Jenni Kalicharan

Date: 9/15/2016 1:16:00 AM

Sadly captivating... Congrats...

Probir Gupta
Date: 9/15/2016 5:56:00 AM

Thank you ...

Marion Mwangi

Date: 9/14/2016 7:44:00 AM

its kind of sad both ways, she appears lonely and broken like she is in mourning(wearing her black attire, bleeding tears in her eyes) he on the other side seems unhappy like he regrets it( he wishes to kiss the cloud)... :-) thats just my take. loved it.

Probir Gupta
Date: 9/14/2016 9:53:00 AM

Nice interpretation ... Thank you ...

Sandra Haight

Date: 9/9/2016 4:32:00 PM

Heartfelt and lovely, Probir. Congrats on your fine placement in the contest. Sandra

Probir Gupta
Date: 9/9/2016 11:19:00 PM

Thank you ...

Paul Callus

Date: 9/9/2016 2:26:00 PM

Truly a captivating and tender write, Probir. Congratulations on this fine win. Regards // paul

Probir Gupta
Date: 9/9/2016 11:21:00 PM

Thank you for the appreciation, Paul...Regards ...

Constance La France

Date: 9/9/2016 11:33:00 AM

Probir, congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderful poem ~

Probir Gupta
Date: 9/9/2016 12:45:00 PM

Thank you so much for the contest and the placement ...

Laura Hay

Date: 9/9/2016 9:36:00 AM

Ditto what Laura Loo said, lovely write, and congrats too, warm regards, Laura.

Probir Gupta
Date: 9/9/2016 9:42:00 AM

Thank you ... Congratulations on your well deserved success of 'Guilty Father'

Lu Loo

Date: 9/9/2016 7:54:00 AM

Probir, "ocean in her blue gaze", lovely imagery, .congrats on your placement! :)-luloo

Probir Gupta
Date: 9/9/2016 9:43:00 AM

Thank you ...

Janis Medders Tobechi

Date: 9/8/2016 5:59:00 PM

Lovely imagery. Congratulations.

Probir Gupta
Date: 9/9/2016 12:37:00 AM

Thank you ...

Agnes Krampe

Date: 9/1/2016 2:30:00 PM

I love what you did with this difficult format. Your poem flows seamlessly. Good luck on the contest, Probir. Agnes

Probir Gupta
Date: 9/2/2016 12:37:00 AM

Thank you for your sincere comment, Agnes ... The format is not so difficult ... Calling up the theme-related images take time ... and getting at the right word takes time too for me because English is not my first language ...