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The Daylight Dreams On

I hoist my sails in a sea-green bottle. Daydream a life, and yet the brown hen still swirls around the barn, her everlasting flap a prelude to nothing at all. The daylight dreams on. Sail with me, there is just enough space in my shipwrecked heart for you, and a speckled chicken. We may have to eat it, or learn to swim along, side by side in a thimble of love. It might do, it just might.

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Date: 12/2/2023 11:32:00 AM
I did not expect to have my heart broken this early on a Saturday, and by an ersatz sailor with his chicken no less. Your shift from first person to direct address at the halfway point enhances the emotional impact and brings me in so close to the verse by the end that I can practically smell dinner. Incredibly evocative imagery. Very, very well done with zooming perspectives here.
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Date: 12/2/2023 10:29:00 AM
Ahh EJ, my brain emptied and just pictured the scene. If it was not for eating the chicken I believe there would be a queue on the dock for this beauty. It's very owl and pussycat with an artistic genius twist :)
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Eric Ashford
Date: 12/2/2023 11:13:00 AM
LOL thanks for this warm review Dilly and your comments are so very perceptive! Respect! E

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