The Countdown

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his body shutting down the sequence activated his vitality a distant memory the notion of time imploding nothing existing outside this suspended realm of surreal animation in and out his breath the metronome in awkward rhythm counting moments left wondering if he has one last I love you left in him or if he’s simply spent and given us his all time standing still with bated breath helpless we hold his hand on the last trek of his journey AP: Honorable Mention 2021 Posted on February 22, 2021

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/23/2021 9:50:00 AM

Sad experience to lose a loved one. The last goodbye in this life is not an easy one. Very expressive and emotive work. Your presence at my page was encouraging. Sara

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/23/2021 10:52:00 AM

Thanks, Sara ~ most appreciated

Heidi Sands

Date: 2/23/2021 8:32:00 AM

Beautifully written Line :)

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/23/2021 9:00:00 AM

Thank you, Heidi ~

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/23/2021 4:18:00 AM

The third verse especially poignant, dear Line! My grandma’s last love you was a tear that rolled from her eye, passed down like a game of telephone to all of us who loved her. Hugging you from here <3

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/23/2021 6:54:00 AM

That's touching, Kim. Thank you ~

J. Summers

Date: 2/22/2021 10:03:00 PM

"we hold his hand on the last trek of his journey," So lovingly expressed. You're in my thoughts. John

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/23/2021 6:55:00 AM

Thank you so much, John ~