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Sara's 'The Cold Embrace of Death Contest ~ 4/12/25

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Heinous are the horrors in the rages of war after it makes its purchase of pawns. Brave are those following orders with a salute. Some will never see their homeland again for the reach of the reaper is relentless. He is a cimmerian chasing after souls, a stalwart fiend approaching in dark pursuit. I am a soldier trying to escape his clutches but my chest was the target of a mortar shell. Lying alone, body bleeding in a trench, I linger, wondering if this is where I die ~~ on this dismal edge of the abyss of hell. I look for stars glowing in the sky but there are no lights shining down on me. My vision is too blurry too see for the hand of Death keeps trying to close my eyes. I beg and plead, "A few moments more." before I hear piteous painful cries and realize the voice is mine. I have no choice but to accept this merciless fate, knowing this ditch will be my burial place. A wretched grave for a brave soldier, but one no longer fearless and willing to die. Soon, I will feel no pain for Death is moving closer to my side. I cannot hide my fear and disdain as tears mingle in the streams of my blood. Numb to it all, I will soon become. My battered body is being bathed in rain. I feel a chill flowing in my veins, draining me of life as if it were a succubus. I'm too weak to fight for one more breath. Death is claiming me, not as its friend, but with arrogance of one who holds power. Thoughts ramble in my last hour, my mind holds profound sullen images of characters in history ~~ I will not die swinging from a wooden gibbet and no dagger will be thrust by Brutus's grasp. Poison Hemlock of Socrates, I will not prohibit. but Death will claim me just as he did Cleopatra when she was bitten by the fangs of an asp. Against the cold embrace of Death's persecution there is no reprisal, no hope left for me. Silently, he will abscond with my life before dawn.

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Date: 4/18/2025 2:30:00 PM
This was so well written and extensively described, a winner in my heart , congrats dear Lin
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Date: 4/18/2025 9:14:00 AM
Dear Lin, I enjoyed hearing your recitation of your heart-wrenching wartime poem. Your imagery is poetically bleak, mournful and moving. A soldier's sacrifice is viscerally felt and his courage is humbly admired. A courage I don't think I'd possess. Congratulations for your success in Sara's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 4/17/2025 9:10:00 AM
Lin, this is quite a look into a noble brave soul wasted and what it means to die like this. I was thinking of WWI while reading, but trench warfare and death like this is still common today. It's hard to imagine why we haven't learned to solve our differences in a more civil way. Take care!
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Date: 4/17/2025 2:14:00 PM
I also got through this one thinking of WWI. I don't know if I'd ever have had the courage to go to war, so putting myself in that trench was a titch of far-fetched, but I bled. Thanks!
Date: 4/16/2025 6:14:00 AM
Congratulations on placing in my contest. I thoroughly enjoyed your interpretation of my prompt. Your imagery of death representation through the trails of war is absolutely brillant. "I feel a chill flowing in my veins, draining me of life as if it were a succubus.," I have to say this line really got my attention. Just deeply dark.
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Date: 4/16/2025 6:36:00 AM
Many thanks, Sara. I put off writing for your contest because I didn't see a path until the soldier scenario suddenly made its way into my thoughts. Sometimes I'm surprised by how easily my pen writes 'deeply dark.'
Date: 4/14/2025 11:37:00 AM
Back with congratulations on your placement in saras contest! I loved this one! Sending you light always
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Date: 4/14/2025 3:44:00 PM
Thanks for the return and message of congrats. ;-)
Date: 4/13/2025 12:47:00 AM
Dear linnersz, this is so soul hitting, powerful, and delicate too how youv so empathetically put yourself in the situation of one fighting for their homeland, i really felt the lines "I look for stars glowing in the sky but there are no lights shining down on me." that hit me so deep! And the ending with your use of mythology and how youv mentioned cleopatra, i think sara would love that, you did end the poem very well and your creative skills with such exquisite wordplay is truly impressive! Youv also read this so well! I love your voice! You sound so gentle and feminine! Pleasure visiting your page today! Best wishes in the contest! Sending you light always
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Date: 4/13/2025 5:45:00 AM
Ink, thank you for such in depth thoughts on what I've written for Sara's contest. It was eerie to put myself inside that trench, feeling death close in, yet trying to stanch the flow of blood and his cold hands grasping for me. Women die in war, too so I guess a sad feminine voice wouldn't be out of place in this situation. Thanks for your well wishes for the contest.
Date: 4/12/2025 10:09:00 AM
Quite a harrowing verse Lin, you take the reader to the scene as he awaits death that will surely come. Love the audio too, you're becoming quite an expert at it, well done. Tom PS Soup Mail.
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Date: 4/12/2025 10:31:00 AM
Thank you, Tom. For the comments, helping me learn the process of adding audio and for a little editing. I owe ya a few hugs and all that friendly stuff for those we hold dear.
Date: 4/12/2025 9:55:00 AM
Wow Lin, just listened to this whilst walking the dog and it's beautiful and such a 'classic' feel - like I've known it (in a resonating way rather than heard it before sense. It rests somewhere deep... I'm still walking the dog, you'll know what I mean haha). The audio is stunning. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 4/12/2025 10:38:00 AM
Putting myself in that soldier's place was difficult and reading it made it all too real for me. I know exactly what you mean, Dilly. Thank you for the thoughtful comments and well wishes.
Date: 4/12/2025 9:48:00 AM
Well you certainly kept with theme throughout this powerful piece Lin, all interwoven with a masterclass of the English language, flawlessly narrated too, the sacrifice and pain our soldiers go through is often brushed over, not here though, an unflinching portrait of the last terrible moments of life on the battlefield, a brilliantly penned elegy, I think Sara will give this one a warm embrace! Cheers David
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Date: 4/12/2025 10:35:00 AM
I should've gotten a guy to record it, but then, men don't hold claim to being the only gender that dies in battle. One for the ladies who suffer the same fate. I tried to imagine being in that situation and the emotions were overwhelming. Thank you, David, for lauding these lines for pen and voice.

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