The Captain

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The Captain is always ,or should be, the last...on the ship.

The oceans waves...hit hard at night Panicking mates...as they gulped in fright On heated rails...they've held on tight Fearing, they not see...tomorrow's light The iceberg's edge...they thought they missed It came upon them...through the mist On hands and knees...the deck they kissed When the mast to sail...had bent and twist Just one lifeboat...to save the crew How many to hold...the captain knew Twenty one men...at tops will do But including himself...there were twenty two The ship was capsized...it was sinking fast Spinning in circles...without it's mast To save himself...the captain passed His time at sea...this was, the last The Last Poetry Contest Sponsored by Silent One 11/27/2018

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Deb Radke

Date: 12/2/2018 9:26:00 PM

What a wonderful poem. You’ve captured the essence of fear and courage, acceptance and sacrifice. Well done, Charlie. Best wishes. Deb

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 11/30/2018 6:14:00 PM

Hello Charlie, as I remember it, the captain down with his ship. At least in those way bck then days. Have a nice evening my friend.

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 11/28/2018 6:13:00 PM

G'day Charles … a nice yarn Charles that more than likely happened many, many times in the times of sail - thank you Charles - Lindsay

Constance La France

Date: 11/28/2018 10:01:00 AM

Charles, great write for the contest, I like it a lot and wish you the best of luck, but a winner to me already ~

Charles Messina
Date: 11/28/2018 1:12:00 PM

Thank you so much, Dear Heart! I got the idea from a movie I recently watched. In the movie, the captain survived as well...much appreciate you kind words :)

Lawrence Sharp

Date: 11/27/2018 10:34:00 PM

Great story, Charles, really good to read.

Charles Messina
Date: 11/28/2018 1:14:00 PM

Thank you, Lawrence! Glad you enjoyed this. I appreciate your kind words and visits. :)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 11/27/2018 3:18:00 PM

Wow! What a great story you tell so eloquently in perfect rhyme. Had a boat and took many people fishing. Spent stormy nights at sea. Could relate to all of this, but the loss at the end. Great entry for the contest! Hugs, Carolyn

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 12/12/2018 7:44:00 AM

You're busy with your contest, Charlie, but lots of Soupers appreciate your kind and generous comments, me included. There's a great pier on the ocean near me and I've caught Sheep's Head, Flounder and Pompano there. Wish you lived nearby so we could go fishing together!

Charles Messina
Date: 11/27/2018 5:30:00 PM

Hello dear Carolyn, Wow! If I'd have known that...I would have gotten to know you a lot sooner (lol) I love fishing. I really appreciate all your wonderful comments, thank you so much for reading my poetry. So glad you couldn't relate to the ending. I have a lot more of your poetry to read up on :) Sending love and hugs :) Charlie