The Birthday Party

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June, the perfect time for a great party. Sprays of gaudy flowers, lights glowing bright. Look everywhere the rich food so hearty. It was John's birthday, we'll stay till twilight. Sprays of gaudy flowers, lights glowing bright. Father picked up the boy, began to swing. It was John's birthday, we'll stay till twilight. Ma and friends happy and began to sing. Father picked up the boy, began to swing. The young boy clapped his hands, felt like a king. Ma and friends happy and began to sing. How wonderful it was to enjoy Spring. The young boy clapped his hands, felt like a king. Look everywhere the rich food so hearty. How wonderful it was to enjoy Spring. June, the perfect time for a great party 20 May 2021 No. of photo 1 Pantoum Rhyme Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Eve Roper

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Marikate Kingston

Date: 7/3/2021 4:46:00 PM

Dear Victor, It sounds so lovely and so much fun. I can imagine as "twilight' arrived, fireflies would arrive too. I would love to be part of a big family. I would sing Mr. John happy birthday and hand him a dandelion crown!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/21/2021 4:31:00 PM

so cute, victor. I need to take a look at her pictures for this contest.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 5/21/2021 11:30:00 AM

The delight filled moments of wonder are captured so well in this peaceful, happy, imagery rich pantoum. Best of contest wishes. :D Evelyn

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 5/20/2021 7:50:00 PM

Brilliantly penned! You surpass yourself! Good luck for the contest, Victor!

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/20/2021 4:37:00 PM

An excellent Pontoum Victor cherished the birthday celebration, streaming with musicality and such adorable contemplations, I hear the sound of delight in your words and feel the rhythms of your Pantoum. I wish you the best of luck in the contest, and I predict a high placement.

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 5/20/2021 11:41:00 AM

A marvellous Pontoum Victor, loved the story of the birthday party, I’d have stayed till twilight too… Belle

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/20/2021 11:37:00 AM

How lovely those gaudy flowers. How fun this party! Lovely work here!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/20/2021 7:50:00 AM

Ahh!! Reads like a good contender for the contest to me. These are not so easy to write but you have done a good job with the flow. Reads like a great time with family on a very special day. Thanks for your visit to my page. Sara

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/20/2021 6:47:00 AM

Hi Victor, You have penned a well-written Pantoum with good content and rhymes. But unfortunately, I can't see the photo. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day, my friend:-) Alexis