Mick Talbot Poet Pantoum

The Beginning

After the world was struck by the moon.
Nature was born after that disaster.
How old our mother, how old is she?
Back then she grew so much faster.
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Nature was born after the disaster.
Natures first life, a single-cell, breathing
Back then she grew so much faster.
The four seasons still sedated. 

Natures first life, a single-cell, breathing.
Spring summer, autumn, winter, when?
All the four seasons still sedated, waiting.
Springtime first life, earth's first season.

Spring summer, autumn, winter, when?
It was the mighty oceans that set life free.
Springtime first life, earth's first season.
Single cells evolved, biodiversity was born.

It was the mighty oceans that set life free.
How old our mother, how old is she?
Single cells evolved, biodiversity was born.
After the world was struck by the moon.



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Darren White October 18, 2017 at 9:09 AM It's a shame the Pantoum contest is closed already, or you could have entered it. I like your Pantoum, it has a subject that works from the very fist line to the last. Check out the contests by the way, you might like them :) all the way on top of the page, in the blue bar you can find 'Contests'

Darren White October 17, 2017 at 6:09 AM Pantoums are not the easiest forms to master, they are seemingly easy, but the venom is in the tail :) There all lines come together and have to form a smooth and flawless stanza. Is your Pantoum for the contest? If so, I want to wish you good luck :) Mick Talbot October 17, 2017 at 7:53 PM Definitely not, in fact, I am indebted to you Darren for I had posted my first draft copy a serious error. As is now the final draft copy is up and correctly formatted this time. I don't know about luck, but love some critiques, from you, or anybody, please.