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The art was most masterful on the dark canvas

If the deepest shade of blue is midnight Whilst the cheapest brands fade a hue I'll let you tell me everything is still alright And I'll sing of love that's ocean deep to you As you catalogue my past mistakes my dear And tell me clearly when last I was wrong Navigate, interrogate through all that I fear I think maybe fate is that I sing a different song Please channel, bring forth an uprising in me For I no longer sing all conflict should sleep Tell me what are echoes to the waves when free The ocean barely knows of walls that keep The art was most masterful on the dark canvas My part subservient til my pallette changed When I open my eyes to be no longer in Kansas Let's not disguise what this distance estranged At midnight the deepest thoughts appear A fight that drowns even the best that sail Despite it all what joins the ocean is a tear My song was a call that love would never fail

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Date: 2/11/2024 12:28:00 PM
Congratulations on your wonderful win/write. Have a wonderful blessed day...............
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Date: 2/13/2024 1:24:00 AM
Thanks Paula
Date: 2/10/2024 11:27:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in my contest. Keep up the good writing.
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Date: 2/10/2024 11:54:00 AM
Thank you Miranda, I appreciate the vote of confidence x
Date: 1/6/2024 3:53:00 PM
I appreciate the subtly of your poem and the allusion to 'Kansas' (Wizard of Oz) was brilliant and creative. There's a great deal of depth to your poem. I especially liked the last two lines: 'what joins the ocean is a tear.' Wow. Have a great evening, Sara
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Date: 1/7/2024 3:00:00 AM
Thank you Sara, I was pleased to hit on Kansas and make it work as there weren't too many rhyme options. Thank you for your kind words, always appreciated x
Date: 1/6/2024 6:33:00 AM
A lot of deeper meaning here Dilly, and I’m not just talking about the ocean, lots of allusion and subtle relationship hints masterfully incorporated into this one, Hey I see you at No 1 on the billboard charts, and deservedly too, you’ve brought so much to the soup in little over a year, and are reaping the awards now, I’m delighted for you, cheers David
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Date: 1/7/2024 2:59:00 AM
Thanks David! I was quite giddy to get to number one :D I really appreciate all your ongoing supportive comments on my poems, they help me see them in different lights and reflect. I'm still a poetic chancer of course. Glad you liked this one. I felt carried away trying to build in a secondary rhyming scheme
Date: 1/6/2024 6:16:00 AM
Whoa! Now this is poetry Dilly. And those last two lines, sublime. Well done
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Date: 1/7/2024 2:56:00 AM
Thanks Tom, appreciated
Date: 1/6/2024 1:09:00 AM
A good poem. Well done.
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Date: 1/7/2024 2:56:00 AM
Thank you

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