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The 20th Day of October

The dawn came late, pallid sun peeping over the horizon scarcely bright enough to scare away the night sky. The pale moon sinks reluctantly in the west, as the first rays, still cold in the colder air, strive to melt the frosted grass. A chill haze hangs above the ground, almost glowing in the early morning light, hiding the long shadows of the autumn browned stalks 'till they are nothing but anonymous smudges on the temporal canvas. Such a fine crisp morning, though it chills to the bone, in some devious incomprehensible way its beauty warms the heart.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 1/11/2011 8:10:00 AM
Wow....this is a beauty! Just beautiful, Nick !!
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Date: 11/10/2010 10:22:00 AM
Wonderful, Nick" Love it ( Lin~RA )
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Date: 11/5/2010 4:59:00 PM
Very descriptive prose poetry..Sara
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Date: 11/3/2010 1:37:00 AM
This captivated me, Nick :)-- very beautifully described and I can't help but feel that chill-wonderful way with words you have here-- btw I hope you don't mind me pointing out the apostrophe in "its" for your last line, I believe it doesn't need it :) hope this helps -- thanks for sharing this awe-inspiring day with us! :) nikko :)
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Date: 11/2/2010 8:59:00 PM
wow, what a wonderful way to put to words this day that you so enjoyed. I love when nature speaks to us this way! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 11/2/2010 8:46:00 AM
Very vivid and visual Nick and pleasant to the reader to absorb its lovely lines.. feeling the cold and frosty chill here in New Jersey this windy day and your poem is so apropos luv.. enjoyed..
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Date: 11/2/2010 7:27:00 AM
very pleased to read this work, well done nick.
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Date: 11/2/2010 6:29:00 AM
What a lovely description of a crisp Autumn day, Nick!! Enjoyed your verse very much. Best wishes, Carolyn
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Date: 10/30/2010 3:15:00 PM
Hi Nick This is s lesson on the use of imagery to create a setting - you really paint your 'picture in words' very skilfully! Best Wishes Carol
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Date: 10/20/2010 11:59:00 AM
Nice narrative write on the 20th day of october, Nick
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Date: 10/20/2010 11:08:00 AM
enjoyed this write of fall very much..TAH
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