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Suddenly from somewhere A street urchin- An untamed bird of the wider sky Dropped down Into the circus tent Before him was unfurled Scenes eerie….awesome!! Roaring lions and tigers, Gibbering baboons, caravans of camels, Animal tamers and acrobats, Artists balancing on poles Swinging from bars to trapeziums Pliant girls with plastic limbs And pouting breasts, Walking on tight ropes. A strange world, Peopled with beasts and men! His face, painted white and red In motley dress, he was arrayed And a tall tapering cap, placed On his forcibly tonsured head He hardly knew what it all meant. He heard the bells ringing And it was time for the show He was told He would henceforth be a clown And should make people laugh A thousand sunsets passed him by He forgot the familiar alleys of the streets Lost sight of the endless pathways of the sky In a world – So populous- so empty, He buried him In the hidden caverns of himself Nursing a hundred bruises Inflicted by Time’s sharp razors Often he was reminded- “You should make others laugh” He did make people laugh While a fountain of tears lay frozen In the slivers of his broken heart!! Jan.7. 2023 ~ Placed Fourth~ Tatters Poetry Contest Sponsor- Mystic Rose Rose

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Date: 1/13/2023 5:31:00 PM
You've excellently painted the carnivals/circus scene my dear friend Valsa with a very beautiful, captivating, moving well crafted story of the main character through your wonderful words. Congratulations on your win and for this brilliant write! Thanks for sharing. God bless you always and your writings my dear friend. Hugs
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Date: 1/13/2023 9:04:00 AM
A dramatic and cinematic act. Captured is a real circus event! Every year as a child a circus came to town, I watched the motley clown from the audience, I no longer wonder why the sad face makeup on tatters, as I laugh at him. Congratulations on your win Valsa! a fav.
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Date: 1/12/2023 4:42:00 PM
You really made the circus come to life. He buried his lonely self in the audience’s laughs, his tears frozen. Congratulations, Valsa!
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Date: 1/12/2023 9:41:00 AM
I'm back with a huge CONGRATS, Valsa. Janice
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Date: 1/12/2023 6:51:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Your "Tatters" is a wonderful story/write. Have a blessed day.......................
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Date: 1/9/2023 6:00:00 AM
Valsa, this is a masterpiece! Janice
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Date: 1/7/2023 7:59:00 PM
Ooh! 'The tears of a clown!' You have nailed this contest perfectly, at least in my opinion. Great write, Valsa!
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Date: 1/7/2023 6:16:00 AM
Wonderfully descriptive write --poignant as his life has become. You shine my friend with every detail that captures the reader.
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Date: 1/7/2023 6:04:00 AM
Valsa, you have crafted the pathos of a sad clown with nothing less than perfection! Your words are stunning and I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem this day! Happy Saturday xxoo
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Date: 1/7/2023 5:45:00 AM
Really appreciated the moving sadness of your poem, Dear Valsa. A tragic picture that you've conjured up using your creative abilities. I hope you do well in Vienna's contest. I wish you a lot of blessings, my friend.
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Date: 1/7/2023 1:45:00 AM
Leoncavallo gave us an opera with its famous "Ridi pagliaccio" a highly dramatic opera. Your poem reminds me of that beautiful aria. You can hear the song on YouTube. You did very well to capture the sadness of a clown. Your poem is so full of imagery and emotions. Great poem, dear Valsa.
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Date: 1/6/2023 9:21:00 PM
A scene of sadness your imagination has created. Love it. Good luck in Vienna's contest. Many blessings my friend
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Date: 1/6/2023 8:08:00 PM
Aww Valsa….so beautifully sad! Enjoyed! Debx
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