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Tanka 2

silently I sit
although my mind shouts loudly
no one sees how deep
this inner conflict reaches
noiselessly, heart wounds bleed out
Copyright, August 29, 2014 Faye Lanham Gibson

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 9/1/2014 2:35:00 PM
Wow powerful! you never know the conflict within. Well said!
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Date: 8/30/2014 10:37:00 AM
yes, the contrast of the screaming mind and the silent heart. Good one, is it for that confessions contest or the tanka one? or neither? Don't you adore tanka!!
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Date: 8/30/2014 10:19:00 AM
Great depth here. "The mind shouts loudly." Yes. No one can fully experience another's secret place. Enjoyed mucho. Love, daver
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Date: 8/30/2014 9:12:00 AM
The inner pain is the most difficult Faye...this wonderfully penned...hugs Tim
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Date: 8/29/2014 5:02:00 PM
Very well expressed.
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Date: 8/29/2014 4:34:00 PM
Pain very aptly described in this one..Enjoyed reading today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 8/29/2014 3:03:00 PM
Dear Faye, It's the wounds inside us that nobody sees. A very well written, heartfelt tanka. Wishing you success in the contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 8/29/2014 2:04:00 PM
very deep Faye:-( Good luck with the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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