Taken

The clock is chiming
Since ancient times
My mind is roaming...I'm in a haze of bewilderment
I'm sprawled in a puzzling maze
Thinking deeply...
wandering...contemplating

My voice is rumbling,
altering into whispers
troubled by the clock
bursting my skull open
releasing tension
oh, how agonizing
deepening in my ruins

my mind blank with ashes

Unable to figure my way out of withering hopelessness...
Thrown into my unfailing demise
Don't seek after me; I'm not wise

My voice is mumbling
Fumbling...stricken with every word I pronounce 
in every devastating line
missing my disoriented family
taken away from my family 
because of my defiant decisions
I foolishly took advantage of that opportunity 

Deepening in my ruins...
Unsaved...unrelieved
Have a generous amount of mercy on my soul 
Because I've been yanked away from my cheerful parents

Give me some hope at least 
Wipe away the unmerciful decisions I took unwisely
or I'll remain in the 
cluster of ruin
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Ponce Avatar
May 5, 2014 at 3:13 AM
2nd on the list. "deepening in my ruins" has got to be my most favorite line from anyone ever. :)
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April 5, 2013 at 4:14 PM
Dear David,YOUR words are so expressive, very Profound write. I can feel the torment of YOUR POETRY Great Quill. Keep the Pen dripping the words from YOUR Soul.uperb Write.With LOVE ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Eternal Liege...Harry
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November 4, 2012 at 1:21 AM
Awww this is really sad and awesome. I love the ending especially. Another brilliantly written verse, Dave. Gottah read more--even though I've already read most of these multiple times. Always, Laura
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June 19, 2011 at 6:02 AM
Inspiration has filled the pages of poetry over this weekend here at PoetrySoup. I am happy to have been able to read your poetry here today. Have a wonderful Sunday I will be back soon to read more David. Love, Carol
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June 18, 2011 at 6:18 PM
Creative write with meaningful expressions, David
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