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Swirling Fog

As the fog swirls misty drops touch Like soft pelting cold rain A chill fills the air circling all Roosters' joy can't contain Songs of the roosters fills the air Floating over the hills All birds seem to sleep in pure peace Then the Mockingbird rills A stillness of air permeates An eerie feel lends fear Is a storm of some kind building Of just weather change near? finis'

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Funom Makama

Date: 11/25/2013 9:59:00 AM

What a way to describe the weather u felt. This poem is magical and so simple... What a beautiful piece you have here!

Joe Maverick

Date: 11/24/2013 2:31:00 PM

You have given a strong 'feel' of created beauty in this home based write Sara, also the edginess of weather patterns or lack of pattern, should i say, well enjoyed..'

Just That Archaic Poet

Date: 11/23/2013 9:01:00 AM

As always, I enjoy your rustic style, Sara; you capture its essence so effortlessly. Wonderful poem which leaves the reader something to ponder; kudos :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/22/2013 5:11:00 PM

Sara, we had some deep fog here 2 days ago... In which inspired my newest poem.. it is penetrating, and creepy at times... Sending smiles your way... LINDA

Kelly Deschler

Date: 11/22/2013 3:40:00 PM

You have perfectly described that eerie calm before the storm. I love the vivid imagery in this one, and I really enjoyed the read! Wonderful work, Sara!...Thank you for the great comments, once again.

Delysia Hendricks

Date: 11/22/2013 2:55:00 PM

You surely are at one with nature. You're very much tuned in. Was it the build-up to a storm after all? Lovely writing, my friend. Licia :-)

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 11/22/2013 2:52:00 PM

Great..loved the middle stanza expecially. Bg

Donna Jones

Date: 11/22/2013 1:34:00 PM

Wonderful sarah....such a distinct feeling here...great job...

Funom Makama

Date: 11/22/2013 11:46:00 AM

very interesting. I enjoyed it.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/22/2013 11:44:00 AM

i love suprises, sara.. will look after this with eagle eyes... :).. so far , soooo good!.. huggs

Nette Onclaud
Date: 11/22/2013 1:05:00 PM

sense of foreboding allows this stunning work to create a magical spell in the end... grreaat storry-telling, sara.. i knew you were into something beautifully eerie... :)