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Swinging Stars

What is the neon mauve moon without trails of twinkling twilight stars that swing in skies? Perhaps, memories are just fluorescent leaves that sing in lifeline-ink of the past, stained with pearl- pastels of present seconds, pulsating heartbeats without 'You and I'.

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Lisa Ricci

Date: 1/20/2024 7:59:00 AM

Good Morning Hiya. Hi. Format aside this entry is very poetic in word choices theme voice and tone. It is one that should be read out loud with emphasis and feeling. I found this to read and hear in the most vintage and truest poetic fashion. Thank you for sharing your poetic skill. It was a pleasure turning to your page. Have a wonderful weekend. Peace Blessings and Light always. (smile) PS your title is magnificent and never did you stray...

Hilo Poet

Date: 11/10/2023 10:46:00 AM

Aloha, Hiya. The use of idyllic words that are interspersed throughout your Tetractys form, highlights the natural essence of your conveyance. They are truly pleasant, 'mauve moon without trails' and 'past, stained with pearl-pastels of present', nicely done. Aloha, William

Silent One

Date: 10/15/2023 7:23:00 AM

This is a lovely poem and you did this form so well.. nice imagery and use of words.. You perfected this one.. you are a very talented poet.. always remember to be unique and as you progress as a poet, you will see what adjectives to use and how many to use.. always remember not to over do it... well done Hiya..

Paige Hind

Date: 10/12/2023 1:28:00 PM

Beautiful poem! I loved the last line.

The Situation

Date: 10/11/2023 7:24:00 PM

What are they? Oh a Tertrectys.

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/11/2023 7:20:00 AM

Wonderful Tertractys, dear Hiya. The sensations that arouse within are so strong and passionate that the heart beats in perfect sync with the depth of your feelings, bringing forth a stream of gifts that overflow from within.Blessings

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/11/2023 7:20:00 AM

I felt carried along on a delicate breeze as I read this piece. The essence of your words like a fragrance remembered.

Christina Bowring

Date: 10/10/2023 11:38:00 PM

Such a beautifully, expressive poem dear Hiya. So deep and profound. Exquisite penning as always from your glowing, talented pen. Loved it! Hugs and smiles to you :):)

Valsa George

Date: 10/10/2023 11:34:00 PM

Hiya, you are indeed so gifted at a young age. I am sure you will reach the acme of poetic success in no time. There is so much depth in your poems . This poem stands apart in the choice of words to express a single thought. "Past leaves umpteen memories in us. memories are just fluorescent leaves that sing in lifeline-ink of the past".... ! Such beautiful lines, Hiya. Into my FAVE.

Joe Dimino

Date: 10/10/2023 10:43:00 AM

"Perhaps, memories are just fluorescent leaves that sing in lifeline-ink" -- Absolutely! Whatever we see and hear outside of us, is the reflection of humanity's inner most soul. Blessings.

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/17/2023 5:07:00 AM

Very true, a very deep feeling you've expressed in this comment, our innermost emotions reflect in the things we see around us.. Thank you so much for your beautiful visit & I'm so grateful for the kind support :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/10/2023 6:49:00 AM

Thanks for sharing this creative one with us. Yes, those stars don't need mankind because God (Jesus) put them in motion. I like the design that the form you used gave the work. Sara

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/17/2023 5:06:00 AM

Yes indeed, God put those stars in motion so that they can heal every wounded soul and twinkle with their pure shine.. Thank you so much for this beautiful comment on my poem, dear Sara, I'm very grateful, sending love :)

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/10/2023 1:29:00 AM

Great emotions that make the heart beat in unison with your sentiments. Blessings

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/17/2023 4:51:00 AM

Wow, this is such a beautiful comment, thank you so much dear Victor, I'm very glad that my poem made you feel so, you're truly kind :)

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/9/2023 2:45:00 PM

congrats on your recent trophy. Your words were exquisite, Hiya, as you lead up to the 'you and I' at the end. I think you're right, 'memories are fluorescent leaves that sing of the past' That was my favorite line...so poignant. You're indeed gifted and creative. Am faving this one, Sara

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/17/2023 4:50:00 AM

Awwn, thank you so much for the Fav dear Sara, receiving such kind words from a stunning poetess like you, really means a lot to me! I always admire your talent of weaving beautiful poems, beyond grateful for your ethereal support as well~ :) sending love..

Jay Narain

Date: 10/9/2023 10:43:00 AM

I love short and beautiful poems. This is one!

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/17/2023 4:47:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kind visit, I'm so happy that you enjoyed reading this~ really grateful- my sincere regards :)

Tom Woody

Date: 10/9/2023 7:13:00 AM

So beautiful in such few but well chosen words. A novel way to describe what was, the "you and I". So glad you're here

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/17/2023 4:46:00 AM

Thank you so much dear Tom, presence of honest and kind people like you makes this a better place, I'm grateful for your beautiful support always :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/9/2023 6:56:00 AM

pastels of present seconds, pulsating heartbeats without 'You and I--I like how linked the past and present in stellar images. Aptly emotive, nicely delivered, Hiya.

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/17/2023 4:45:00 AM

Thank you so much for your precious words of kindness, I'm always so happy to receive such beautiful comments by you! Really grateful~ you're a brilliant poet :) - regards

Arastu Goyal

Date: 10/9/2023 4:48:00 AM

"pulsating heartbeats without 'You and I'" such a creative line! I loved reading this :-)

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/17/2023 4:44:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kind comment, I'm so glad that you loved reading this, very grateful :)

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 10/9/2023 3:10:00 AM

This is a dream, a starlit promise, a reflection of the heart's soft hold on light and gentleness and hope. I just love this so. God bless you. Love, Gina

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/17/2023 4:43:00 AM

Thank you so much dear Gina, you're so poetic even in comments, such a pure soul you are! I'm really happy that you loved reading this :)

Ink Empress

Date: 10/9/2023 2:20:00 AM

I got on your page to comment and i smiled as i saw the trophy lol, ok now back to this poem! Where do i start, i love this form tetractys, one of those forms easiest to do for me. I love every word woven here in such eloquence. The way your words flow in such a poignant manner expressing so ink of your lifeline, memories that keep haunting you, as you are left “ without them” and funny, as i read this i am listening to “ with or without you “ by U2! Listen to it little angel! You might like.

Hiya Sharma
Date: 10/17/2023 2:54:00 AM

Awwn, you're the cutest! And now I'm so happy too, because you won a trophy as well, so cool! I remember learning this form from you, how impeccably you do it everytime.. And I'm glad that you loved reading this, yes that song by U2, ah, really goes with this, it's a whole vibe!

Tom Woody
Date: 10/9/2023 7:11:00 AM

Ahhh I see I got your U2 mojo going lol

Ink Empress
Date: 10/9/2023 2:22:00 AM

I really love the line “ twinkling twilight stars that swing in skies?“ “ pearl-pastels of present seconds, “ those alliterations and the imagrry depth of what you’ve conveyed there truly blew me away! I felt the pulsating pain! So good! One of your best tetractys! Fave