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"Sweet Tears of Sorrow - II" rewritten to improve the last stanza.

Sweet tears of sorrow streaming down, I feel your warm embrace. Falling as you break the strings that hold my heart in place. Dreams that wander aimlessly, like a beggar with no home, wash up on lifeless shore to fade - to die alone. Hope that comes from an empty heart depends on fortune's call. Never to find a lasting peace, not seeking Heaven's thrall. entered in Becca Teagan's - Make Me Feel It - poetry contest written June 26, 2016

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Date: 9/26/2016 7:01:00 PM
beautiful Fran...congratulations on your placement :)-luloo
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Francis J Grasso
Date: 9/26/2016 9:25:00 PM
Thank you, luloo. ...Fran
Date: 6/28/2016 4:11:00 PM
YES, the last line is now improved. Wonderful revision, my friend!!
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Francis J Grasso
Date: 6/29/2016 9:56:00 PM
I like the way it reads much better now, too. Thank you, Andrea.

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