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I saw evil last night, evil in the form of a sweet fleshed beauty, evil in the form of sparkling eyes, with the fork of serpent’s tongue. I saw evil, perhaps, not in its entirety; as with goodness, evil is an abundant and all consuming well. So young, so stained by herself and others, this child daily sought the flame, stealing from anyone, anything; she could. From the fragile, translucent, moth to kitten’s lick, she enticed beyond bounds. Her beauty narcotic, evil bathed in jasmine, giving kisses to gain access to her drug of choice. Failure’s false excuses acts dispensing sexual pleasures; luring with ribald sensation with filthy lucre. Flames leapt from the eyes of the sweetest face, recalling the pill vials abundance and place; recalling the ease of reach. Her thrusting tongue-tip, licked and leapt. at the drooled corners of her strawberry-pink lips. The lips she would let his aged, sick, body, kiss, all for the high, his legal drugs would bring. She stay. She’d give him everything— He didn't pay in money, surely, there was no crime? So near death, he’d pray. “Lord God please heal me.” He’d say. She’d smile and the horned corners of her lips would rise. He’d seek life’s affirmation between her thighs. She’d stay—until he died.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 10/1/2011 1:29:00 PM
Fantastic write well~done on winning Congtatulations.
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Date: 9/30/2011 1:10:00 PM
Definitely a crime, Deb. Very well written. Loved the next to last line. Awesome! Congratulations on your win! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/29/2011 5:56:00 PM
Awesome write,Debbie.Congratulations on your well deserved win.You are wonderful and meticulous.keep it up lady.....and THANKS for all your comments and observations.May GOD bless you for having an eagle`s eye......You are the.....B..B.BEST.
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Date: 9/29/2011 11:45:00 AM
Wow Debbie-this one is a little 'wild'-fantastic job! Congrats. on your win in my contest :)
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Date: 9/29/2011 11:12:00 AM
Congratulations on your great win in the contest,Debbie!
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Date: 9/29/2011 7:33:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in this contest Debbie. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/29/2011 5:58:00 AM
Congratulations on the win in the contest of Natalie, Debbie
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Date: 9/29/2011 12:30:00 AM
Hey, I see you got a huge fan down here in jeff!! Can ya boil water?hahaha. Congrats on a very well deserved win.
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Date: 9/28/2011 10:38:00 PM
Congrats Debbie on another excellent win with dazzling words reflecting contest theme so perfectly luv..
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Date: 9/8/2011 7:03:00 PM
Absolutely a winner I believe. Disgustingly Criminal for sure. CR
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Date: 9/7/2011 6:40:00 PM
I WROTE HOW SUCCINCTLY YOU WROTE "I'M IN LOVE" NOW THIS EPIC POEM, TELL ME, CAN YOU BOIL WATER ALSO, CUZ IF YOU CAN I NEED YOU TO COME LIVE WITH ME...SO LONG AS YOU DON'T MIND LIVING ON THE SIDE OF A HIGHWAY....YOU TALK ABOUT BLESSINGS AND STUPH LIKE THAT.....SO FAR AS I CAN SEE YOU ARE A BLESSING I AM NOT WORTHY OF..YOUR'S IN PUKING, PUTRICATION AND PISS....YOUR FAN UNTIL I'M UNDERGROUND....~free cee!~ luvyadollface!
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Date: 9/7/2011 1:27:00 AM
Beautifully presented' the lady in evil',Deb.It is great in visual effect.Have a nice day!Fabiyas
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Date: 9/6/2011 10:18:00 PM
geeez, Debs. STRONG stuff. Is it for the deep and dramatic contest? It sure does fit the bill!! I enjoyed it and the great imagery.
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