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Repost of an oldie!

Sweet Ghost Valentine

An old house I am led to -it is the symbol of memories in cobwebs - like those of old lost love. A storehouse for so many things buried in my mind. I open up its creaking door to see what I might find. Lovely notes come waaftng down the stairs to me. My poor heart tears to hear that poignant melody. It brings to me the image of one afternoon when I walked with someone in summer by the dune. I listen to the tickling of the ivory, picturing two people splashing each other by the sea. The music now is drifting to me soft and low. I see the setting sun. We’re bathed in crimson glow. Beautifully and slowly the notes keep being played. In the arms of my old love rhythmically I’m swayed. The keys of the piano now are pounding fast. In the moonlight he and I are making love at last. Finally the keys are played as if they were caressed, and a bitter sweetness swells within my breast. Slowly creeping up the stairs I go to learn the truth. Who has played this long-time buried memory of youth? On the old piano’s bench, I see an imprint lies, and I think I can hear my phantom lover’s sighs. Sweet ghost valentine, will you please return and play again that melody of love for which I yearn? Submitted June 26, 2022 for Mark Toney's the '2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 5' Poetry Contest
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Hind Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 6:21 PM
Wow, this is such a haunting atmosphere. I loved your beautiful metaphor of the piano.
Kauffman Avatar
July 8, 2022 at 10:23 AM
This poetic composition is so wonderfully composed Andrea with intricate rhyme patterns and in lyrical excellence. Congratulations on your win!
Alex Avatar
July 4, 2022 at 5:11 AM
What a wonderful title! Great writing too. Congratulations!
Logan Avatar
July 4, 2022 at 3:26 AM
A well written entry resurfaces for a place on the marathon winning list. Congratulations, Andrea.
George Avatar
July 3, 2022 at 11:19 PM
Got carried away by the music from the piano played by your 'sweet ghost Valentine' ! A mesmerizing vision you have created. The old house and the old love --- great twinning ! Congratulations, Andrea on your win in the Marathon race.
Rushing Avatar
July 3, 2022 at 2:00 PM
Congratulations Andrea a well deserved win with this gorgeous poem!
Ashley Avatar
July 2, 2022 at 9:18 PM
Such romantic yearning deserves to be savored.. beautiful and lyrical poetry, Andrea. Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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July 2, 2022 at 2:15 PM
This "repost of an oldie" (your words) is enchanting, Andrea. Congratulations on your win on Mile 5 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Mile 6 has already started, and guess what? You're currently in 3rd position overall! You can find the current standings in my blog post.
Toney Avatar
July 3, 2022 at 9:50 AM
Andrea, you had a podium finish in the 2019 Poetry Marathon and you’re currently on target. Kudos to you!
Dietrich Avatar
July 3, 2022 at 9:35 AM
yes, I had posted this twice on Soup, so I was submitting it for the umpteenth time to a contest, but the reposted version of it. I am sure I will not attain a top position in the marathon but I'm trying like heck to at least make the final ten!
Watt Avatar
July 2, 2022 at 12:40 PM
Congrats on your win today! It was great to read this romantic and musical gem again ~ John
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October 18, 2021 at 1:00 PM
Often a poem loses some of her luster in the middle - your middle was strong. "The music now is drifting to me soft and low. I see the setting sun. We’re bathed in crimson glow.. Beautifully and slowly the notes keep being played. In the arms of my old love rhythmically I’m swayed." Very nicely done. Congratulations
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October 18, 2021 at 10:38 AM
So haunting - so to speak - Andrea. This love song echoes in your heart bringing back sweet memories and tender longing. Congratulations on your win!
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October 17, 2021 at 10:25 AM
Congratulations on your win. A lovely/romantic~~story/write. Loved your last line. Oh yes, "melody of love" return. Have a blessed autumn day.....................
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October 16, 2021 at 11:43 AM
Hey Andrea, a love with memories as you have can never be forgotten and the yearning becomes almost unbearable - well penned my friend - hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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October 15, 2021 at 4:32 PM
A wonderful romantic memory in a ghostly poem, truly beautiful Andrea… Belle
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October 15, 2021 at 11:05 AM
What a beautiful romantic write dear Ria...Great imagery... Awesome my friend...with great flow of thoughts...best wishes and hugs... ~ Ani
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October 15, 2021 at 4:11 AM
Yes...that irreplaceable love now passed on. I think of that love -- and I think of youth...they are inseparable; though even with age, the memory somewhat fades...but the spirit is ever lurking, looking to redeem itself in all nature's resplendent beauty. I think, your love poem has reminded me, that Love is immortal! Excellent read! Beautiful poetry!
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October 15, 2021 at 2:04 AM
Marvellous. So many images and wishes for pat music. HUgs.
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October 14, 2021 at 10:15 PM
Andrea, as I've loved your lyrical art for years now, this poem is transcendent...love, mystery, haunting...few poets can comfort my anxious mind as you, to mine faves, as Ruben O was fond of saying years ago!
Roper Avatar
October 14, 2021 at 9:29 PM
great write, Andrea, sure for a great win.
Bayles Avatar
October 14, 2021 at 9:17 PM
Andrea, I love the ending, the last two lines.
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October 14, 2021 at 8:13 PM
Andrea, There is a depth to your poem that sings in fine-tuned piano keys. I don't know what they put in the water from your streams, but it sinks deep in the wells of my mind. Keep drinking and drinking my poet friend. -Richard
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October 14, 2021 at 5:33 PM
You've created a lovely, mournful nostalgia of a romantic rendezvous, Andrea. With each element of the tune reflecting its memory. From start to finish, I was utterly enthralled.
Watt Avatar
October 14, 2021 at 1:29 PM
A tune can bring back vivid memories of a moment, a person, or a period of our life. You have woven such a delightful, melancholy remembrance of a romantic encounter with each part of the tune recalling its own memory. I was entranced from start to finish.
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