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April.28.2024
Surreality Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Tom Woody

 

Surreal

I remember having gone to bed a little tired, And soon fell into a deep sleep. Night chill prickled my skin. I felt unusually light. Wasn’t sure what had come about, But was shocked at the eerie sight. In the place of my hands, Had sprouted a pair of wings. My mouth had pointed and curved like a beak. Words came out like twittering songs. My long and flabby legs, Had turned into wire like sticks. And my toes shaped into sharp pointed claws. A tail had been fitted upon my back. I was covered in a plumage of brown. My body had thinned and turned so light, And on my head, I had a red little crown. Feeling a strange urge to fly, I flapped my wings and threw myself into the air But I had a nose dive into the woods below Never knew flying was like playing with fire. Luckily, I could perch on the branch of a tree. Looking around I saw a parrot green. He said he would teach me to fly. He was at rest behind the foliage screen. He said ‘Hop, hop from branch to branch, One step at a time will take you miles along’ One full day, religiously hopped the way I was told The next day as I flew in rounds, he came along Abruptly he announced, looking into the blue sky “Oh come! On wings of joy, we’ll fly Let us flit over hills and skim over dales” “Tuwee! Tuwee”, in shrill delight, we flew across the sky. With a strange sensation I got out of my bed. I have been dreaming all the while. I could hear the morning choir of songsters, From the nearby mango tree. Also, the sun beams, Filtering down through the thickly draped window of my room I have been still under the kick of my surreal dream!
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George Avatar
May 4, 2024 at 6:15 AM
And that's the fun of it. Being able to be something else in a fantasy world. The ability to say dream or imagine is amazing. I hope you fly so high. Lovely piece.
Narain Avatar
May 2, 2024 at 10:07 AM
A nice fantasy to turn into a bird and learn form a parrot how to fly. A real surrreal dream.
Empress Avatar
April 30, 2024 at 9:22 AM
Dear sweet valsa, beautiful, how you’ve given surreality a definition, so poetically captivating with such vivid descriptions! I love the way youv painted imagery throughout this and how your poem Flows in such eloquence as always. I hope you did well with this entry, surreal a feeling iv experienced so intensely recently too, youv written so well’ i love especially how youv written “Looking around I saw a parrot green. He said he would teach me to fly. He was at rest behind the foliage screen.” Ah so dreamy and enchanting! Made me dream away too and imagine this scenery youv delivered! You always know how to weave words in a way that readers would really enjoy! I definitely did! Pleasure always reading your work! Sending you light always
Rolland Avatar
April 30, 2024 at 8:44 AM
a fascinating poem, such a dream, to be changed in a bird, you poem is a jewel and so original dream, a dream i would so much like to dream,, thanks poet
Buhagiar Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 3:27 AM
Your fantasy has taken you to realms unknown. Such a wonderful poem which I hope it will place high. Best for a win.
Poet Avatar
April 28, 2024 at 12:56 PM
The fundamental themes of a beautiful poem, Valsa, are metamorphosis and coming into one's own. You did an excellent job of describing the fantastical journey of becoming a bird in a dream, gaining the wings with the guidance of a sage parrot, and then experiencing the thrill and liberation of flying. Your poetry is so full of life and imagination that it transports the reader to a surreal world. Using words like "prickled my skin," "twittering songs," and "sharp pointed claws," you vividly describe the change that takes place. The vivid sensory descriptions bring the poem's fantastical happenings to life for the reader.
Cunningham Avatar
April 27, 2024 at 11:14 PM
What an amazing dream you had Valsa, be wonderful if that became a reality. Best of luck in the contest and enjoy your weekend. Tom
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