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Sunset - 4 Seasons - Haiku

brilliant orb sunclipse orange aglow Melancholy prayer blazing sun falling silent tears the day gone vineyards rest muted in shadow curtain falls charcoal fire echoing sundown final song plays _________________ Sunset Contest "Sunrise Verses Sunset" Poet ~ Rick Parise Spring Summer Autumn Winter

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John Freeman

Date: 5/26/2011 6:27:00 PM

Rick! A pleasure to see your poem's honored in third place. Congratulations! Agape, Moses

Kash Poet

Date: 5/26/2011 12:13:00 PM

Beautiful Haiku.Congrats Rick on your win....

Tahera Mannan

Date: 5/26/2011 4:46:00 AM

A beautiful string Rick. Many congrats.

Dr Hitendra Mehta

Date: 5/26/2011 3:17:00 AM

Many congrats ^Rick on big win in HG's contest with this excellent entry. Luv & Best wishes - Hitendra Mehta

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/25/2011 6:13:00 PM

Congrats Rick on your awesome win in this contest by HG with this vivid and vibrant entry my friend.. enjoy another super win with luv..

Joyce Johnson

Date: 5/25/2011 4:28:00 PM

Nicely done Rick. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/25/2011 3:13:00 PM

Congratulations on this win in the contest of HG, Rick

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 5/25/2011 2:41:00 PM

OH Rick you are getting MUCH better, I only saw one kinda error in haiku we don't judge/tell the reader how to feel, we are to present an image to evoke a feeling, so in haiku 1 you would not use melancholy Summer Autumn Winter all okies!!And good, 2parts just right in each, work a wee bit more on including the scenses [instead of melancholy if you said / call to prayer..it would be evoked..CONGRAD's BRAVO BIG STRIDES!