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Sudden Storm

The acrid, metallic taste of the air, Full of electricty, stirring my hair, Was just a first sign of thunder storm brewing, Urging me haste in what I was doing. The day which had been so arid and bright Was darkening now as if early night, And cooling so fast, I quite felt a chill, Out here on the prairie with never a hill. I must swiftly seek for some sort of cover, If struck by the lightning, my life would be over. The clap of the thunder was louder and nearer, The zigzags of lightning filled me with great fear. A child of the prairie, aware of the danger, To these sudden storms, I was hardly a stranger. Knowing that lightning sought tallest things round To carry her energy into the ground, I fell and curled up to make myself small Just as the huge raindrops started to fall. Pungent earth smells arose as I lay there in it, I was soaked to the skin in barely a minute. Then as fast as it started the storm had blown over. I'd survived on the prairie, without any cover. Inspired by Deborah's contest Five Senses/ Five Elements Taste (of the air) Touch (stirring my hair or felt a chill) Hearing ( clap of thunder) Seeing (lightning flashes) Smelling (Pungent earth smells) Water (raindrops) Wind (storm blown over) Earth (lying on ground) fire (lightning flashes) metal (metallic taste) Won 6th place

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Date: 4/13/2009 7:00:00 AM
Great job, Joyce! Congratulations on this winning poem ~ love, Carrie
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Date: 4/13/2009 5:39:00 AM
Warmest congrats Joyce in your win in Debbie's contest! Awesome write - so sorry I missed this! Love, Shar
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Date: 4/13/2009 1:00:00 AM
Congrats on your success in Debbie's contest Joyce.Rgds Brian
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Date: 4/12/2009 12:01:00 PM
Congrats in placing in Debroah's contest, Happy Easter...Raul
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Date: 3/14/2009 7:52:00 AM
I live in Kansas and can relate to this. You truly captured the essence of the storms and the fear that we all live here. The imagery is beautiful and you definately covered all of the senses and elements here. Great luck to you in the contest. Smiles from Lolita
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Date: 3/14/2009 3:55:00 AM
Hi Joyce A wonderful poem capturing all the experience of the storm. Hope you do well in the competition. God bless. Leon
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Date: 3/14/2009 2:29:00 AM
Smile~I believe You covered them all dear lady! And luckily for You and Your admiring readers, You made it through that moment of sudden storms rising! I enjoy Your writings dear lady! For they are always vivid and filled with wonderful thoughts and images! And always, penned and expressed so very well!!~"My Love & Warmth Always To 'You & Your Loves, John!!:):)
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