Streams

 Fair dancing maidens
With jingling silver anklets
Rushing down the hills 

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A Strand's (1068) Poetry Contest

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/5/2025 12:47:00 PM

Apt description of a noisy running stream Congratulations on this winner. Way to go. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing.. Sara K

Alexis Y.

Date: 3/3/2022 6:26:00 AM

WoW! Valsa, This is lovely. You painted a delightful picture with words. Congratulations on your win. PS, in your most recent Haiku, change the title to lower case letters. Have a nice day-Alexis

Valsa George
Date: 3/3/2022 8:46:00 AM

Thanks a lot Alexis for your suggestion for correction of the title of my haiku ! I did as suggested ! Greatly appreciate your sincerity. Thanks once more !

Debra L Brown

Date: 2/12/2022 12:20:00 PM

Congratulations on your win Valsa, enjoyed . Hugs ~ Debra

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/8/2022 8:25:00 PM

Ooh! This is goooooooood! A FAVE for me, me... and a winner in the contest for sure, methinks... Maidens streaming; suitors dreaming... An 'aha! moment' here. ~ Lost in reverie, gw

Christuraj Alex

Date: 2/8/2022 7:53:00 PM

Beautiful comparison and image. Great haiku. Congratulations!

I Am Anaya

Date: 2/8/2022 4:54:00 PM

Valsa I so miss dancing, the days fall shorter and I'm slower...you bring memories, good luck!

JCB Brul

Date: 2/8/2022 3:15:00 PM

Oh so Mystifying. You painted a gorgeous imagery with this stunning Haiku. I feel like I am looking at a masterpiece on the wall. Brevity at its best. Congratulations dear friend.

Bill Baker

Date: 2/7/2022 5:13:00 PM

I sense they feel purposeful in their work and from a different view, playful and looking forward to washing in the stream. I got two for the price of one with this Haiku, Valsa. Thanks for sharing your poetry with us, Bill

Robert Gorelick

Date: 2/7/2022 2:58:00 PM

Enchanting visual, so cinematic Valsa.

Anil Deo

Date: 2/7/2022 12:56:00 PM

I've seen them, in colors and traditional regalia, courtesy of Bollywood. Nonurban people have so much color, so much vivacity ... Naturally. Shalom shalOm dear sis