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Driving back home in my old black jalopy The kids in the back were getting quite stroppy Storm clouds were gathering straight ahead I felt a chill for I could sense danger in my head The darkness intensified before our very eyes Rain started to lash down, it was no surprise A huge clap of thunder rang in our ears The children were crying I could feel their fears Lightning streaks across the skies The children scream and cover their eyes Dark shadows from trees create vivid scenes Like twisted old witches in my darkest dreams Suddenly across the road a tree is falling I am going to crash I hear destiny calling Lightning flashes light up the sky But this is not our time to die Good evening Ma'am I'm from the AA I just happened to be driving this way We were all reassured by guys gentle smile He helped us move the tree in a very short while. Fascination gripped the kids in the back of the car As the kind gentleman told us how lucky we are That tree could have crushed us but for fates intervention The way god works beyond our comprehension. Off to Mcdonald's the kids deserve a treat A big mac and fries they excitedly eat You ring your mum to say we are on our way home See you soon grandma the kids shout through the phone. Written for Shadow Hamilton's Storms Contest - Awarded 7th Place 06-29-14 Written by Jan Allison & Darren Watson

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Date: 7/5/2014 10:46:00 AM
Hey Jadazzle, I wanted to thank you for the wonderful comment on my poem "To All Our Poets True". It was encouraging and very much appreciated. Also, I truly love this poem of yours - it takes us on that somewhat frightful journey through the storm and brings us back to safety and a "good deed". hugs back to you, Neva
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Jadazzle United
Date: 7/5/2014 2:59:00 PM
Thanks for dropping by to read our poem Neva. Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 7/4/2014 7:56:00 PM
Well-crafted from beginning to end! Congrats on your win!
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Date: 7/5/2014 2:11:00 AM
Many thanks for the lovely comment Gail. hugs Jan x
Date: 7/3/2014 12:40:00 PM
Wonderfully penned Jadazzle ! Great imagery ,, congrats on big win!
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Date: 7/3/2014 4:36:00 PM
Thanks for the lovely comment Dr Sharma. Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 7/2/2014 9:43:00 AM
Sounds like a true story... Well done! Congratulations!
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Date: 7/2/2014 12:21:00 PM
Thanks Roy it's written purely from our imaginations. we work so well together the poems just flow and I am delighted you found it so believable. Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 7/2/2014 4:24:00 AM
Like I'm put in a final destination scene but good it has happy ending..:) kudos!!!
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Date: 7/2/2014 7:50:00 AM
Thanks for dropping by with your comment Olive. Hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/1/2014 9:20:00 PM
Sweet, glad to see this on the winners list! :) super happy hugs:)
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Date: 7/2/2014 2:15:00 AM
Thanks as ever for your support Casarah. Hugs Jan x
Date: 7/1/2014 8:04:00 PM
Hi Jadazzle, congratulations on a wonderful write and fine win! Warmest regards.
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Date: 7/2/2014 2:14:00 AM
thanks for dropping by with your lovely comment Pandita. Hugs Jan x
Date: 7/1/2014 6:58:00 PM
great story line Jadazzle congrats on placing hugs
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Date: 7/2/2014 2:14:00 AM
Thanks Shadow we are delighted to be placed in your contest. Many thanks Jan & Darren xx
Date: 7/1/2014 12:55:00 PM
after the storm, a rainbow.. a delightful piece that makes me smile.. so goood,jan.. huggs
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Date: 7/1/2014 4:14:00 PM
Thanks Nette we so enjoy writing together I'm the luckiest lady in the world to have such a fantastic writing partner and wonderful friend in Darren. Hugs as ever Jan xxx
Date: 6/30/2014 4:34:00 PM
Great story telling with wonderful timing. Thank you for leaving a comment on my poem it gave me the opportunity to read yours. I'm flattered you like mine. Sandra
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Date: 6/30/2014 5:10:00 PM
That's the joy of the site Sandra If you comment hopefully people will respond:-) so pleased you enjoyed our poem. Hugs as ever Jan xx
Date: 6/30/2014 2:22:00 PM
That was incredible! Well done!
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Date: 6/30/2014 2:33:00 PM
Thank you so much for dropping by with your lovely comment M L. Hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/30/2014 8:39:00 AM
This is just awesome you put us there with you, well constructed story, loved it... love Jayne x
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Date: 6/30/2014 10:14:00 AM
Thanks for the lovely comment Jayne. Hugs Jan x
Date: 6/29/2014 5:14:00 PM
Wow, great event. Some storms are hard to avoid, but lucky for fate that no damaged occurred, Great one you two!!
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Date: 6/29/2014 5:36:00 PM
Thanks Casarah for your lovely comment as ever:-) Hugs Jan xxxx
Date: 6/29/2014 10:49:00 AM
:) Beautiful....You guys work so well together. All's well that ends well! Hugs
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Date: 6/29/2014 12:50:00 PM
Thanks for the lovely comment Eileen we have great fun since day one I am the luckiest lady in the world to have such a wonderful writing partner and fabulous friend in Darren. Hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/29/2014 10:37:00 AM
A nice fairy tale ending...did Darren get a happy meal? ..lol
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Date: 6/29/2014 12:51:00 PM
lmao
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Jadazzle United
Date: 6/29/2014 12:47:00 PM
Yes Tim hes still busy playing with his toy! Hugs as ever Jan xxx

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