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Storm of Hearts

Storm of hearts You can see in her eyes, there's a storm in her heart Accusations boom in verbal sonic thunder Rains flood her sullen cheeks, as her levees break apart Harsh words cut deep, now her heart is sawed asunder Lightning flashes strike at the heart of a matter Polar winds collide, meeting the heated Gulf Stream Violent winds, reveal truth, causing hearts to shatter Twisting tornadoes churning nightmares from sweet dreams Hurtful words sting her face, like an icy hailstorm With deceitful lies, you camouflage your blunder Betrayal detected as love's radar informs Tsunami waves of guilt crash, and pull you under Fits of jealousy raging like a hurricane When trust is broken, life can never be the same John Derek Hamilton July 28,2017

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Susan Ashley

Date: 11/2/2017 10:05:00 PM

This write is outstanding John. Powerfully, dramatically and artistically written. Your stormy imagery is riveting and your first line has that dramatic intrigue that just pulls you in for the hell ride... Excellent and enjoyed so very much!

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/3/2017 2:58:00 PM

Yes it is John, I love your poetry :)

John Hamilton
Date: 11/3/2017 10:55:00 AM

Thanks so much Susan, I like it when someone comments on an older poem, reminds me, I often forget what I write, and I too enjoy going back to read them again. Thanks for your well chosen words, I know it's sincere!

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 8/23/2017 6:26:00 PM

Wow, John!!! What drama. You really feel the storm!

John Hamilton
Date: 8/23/2017 8:09:00 PM

Thanks SW I like your comment, so nice!

Eve Roper

Date: 8/18/2017 2:49:00 AM

Congratulations on your win, John, the imagery is fabulous ~*

John Hamilton
Date: 8/18/2017 8:05:00 AM

Thanks Eve, I enjoyed the challenge, glad you liked it!

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 8/16/2017 3:22:00 AM

Wonderful metaphor and ambiguity, John, and an exquisite work of art! I love this, my friend, and congrats on your well-deserved win ... excellent! :-)

John Hamilton
Date: 8/16/2017 1:38:00 PM

Thanks Greg, I appreciate that very much!

Alberta Loepppky

Date: 8/14/2017 8:04:00 PM

Nice the way you used the creation to get your point across. I especially liked the last line, to bad but true. Love always, mom

Bernard Chan

Date: 7/30/2017 8:26:00 AM

The way you use the forces of nature as an analogy for the destructiveness of jealousy makes it so dramatic and engaging. Powerful and brilliant!!

John Hamilton
Date: 7/30/2017 12:28:00 PM

Thanks Bernard I'm glad you enjoyed it, I do appreciate your kind words!

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/28/2017 3:14:00 PM

Hi John, I agree with this well written poem. When trust is broken " All hell breaks loose". You did a great conveying job that point. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis

John Hamilton
Date: 7/28/2017 3:18:00 PM

Thanks Alexis, I'm glad you enjoyed this write, thanks for the nice visit!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/28/2017 2:36:00 PM

- Jealousy makes the person who loves total blind, a painful disease John - A really great written poem - Luck in the contest - Happy weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

John Hamilton
Date: 7/28/2017 3:09:00 PM

Thanks Anne Lise

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/28/2017 12:58:00 PM

Wow John. You have really shown what it can be like. I agree with Jan. Very powerful. I hope it does well in the contest :)

John Hamilton
Date: 7/28/2017 1:06:00 PM

Thanks Heidi, I appreciate your positive comment, sonnets or any structured poetry is so hard for me, but once in a while I discipline my mind and force it to produce something other than lyrics, glad you enjoyed it! Let's see if Constance shares your enthusiasm.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/28/2017 11:53:00 AM

Such a powerfully penned sonnet John your vivid imagery depicts an incredibly stormy relationship. Good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

John Hamilton
Date: 7/28/2017 1:03:00 PM

Thanks Jan, this one took so long, that's why I rarely do sonnets, it's too much like work, hope Constance likes it!