John Hamilton Poet Sonnet

Storm of Hearts

Storm of hearts

You can see in her eyes, there's a storm in her heart
Accusations boom in verbal sonic thunder
Rains flood her sullen cheeks, as her levees break apart
Harsh words cut deep, now her heart is sawed asunder

Lightning flashes strike at the heart of a matter
Polar winds collide, meeting the heated Gulf Stream
Violent winds, reveal truth, causing hearts to shatter
Twisting tornadoes churning nightmares from sweet dreams

Hurtful words sting her face, like an icy hailstorm
With deceitful lies, you camouflage your blunder
Betrayal detected as love's radar informs
Tsunami waves of guilt crash, and pull you under

Fits of jealousy raging like a hurricane
When trust is broken, life can never be the same

John Derek Hamilton
July 28,2017

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Susan Ashley November 2, 2017 at 10:05 PM This write is outstanding John. Powerfully, dramatically and artistically written. Your stormy imagery is riveting and your first line has that dramatic intrigue that just pulls you in for the hell ride... Excellent and enjoyed so very much! Susan Ashley November 3, 2017 at 2:58 PM Yes it is John, I love your poetry :) John Hamilton November 3, 2017 at 10:55 AM Thanks so much Susan, I like it when someone comments on an older poem, reminds me, I often forget what I write, and I too enjoy going back to read them again. Thanks for your well chosen words, I know it's sincere!

Sunlite Wanter August 23, 2017 at 6:26 PM Wow, John!!! What drama. You really feel the storm! John Hamilton August 23, 2017 at 8:09 PM Thanks SW I like your comment, so nice!

Eve Roper August 18, 2017 at 2:49 AM Congratulations on your win, John, the imagery is fabulous ~* John Hamilton August 18, 2017 at 8:05 AM Thanks Eve, I enjoyed the challenge, glad you liked it!

Gregory Richard Barden August 16, 2017 at 3:22 AM Wonderful metaphor and ambiguity, John, and an exquisite work of art! I love this, my friend, and congrats on your well-deserved win ... excellent! :-) John Hamilton August 16, 2017 at 1:38 PM Thanks Greg, I appreciate that very much!

Alberta Loepppky August 14, 2017 at 8:04 PM Nice the way you used the creation to get your point across. I especially liked the last line, to bad but true. Love always, mom

Bernard Chan July 30, 2017 at 8:26 AM The way you use the forces of nature as an analogy for the destructiveness of jealousy makes it so dramatic and engaging. Powerful and brilliant!! John Hamilton July 30, 2017 at 12:28 PM Thanks Bernard I'm glad you enjoyed it, I do appreciate your kind words!

Alexis Y. July 28, 2017 at 3:14 PM Hi John, I agree with this well written poem. When trust is broken " All hell breaks loose". You did a great conveying job that point. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis John Hamilton July 28, 2017 at 3:18 PM Thanks Alexis, I'm glad you enjoyed this write, thanks for the nice visit!

Anne-Lise Andresen July 28, 2017 at 2:36 PM - Jealousy makes the person who loves total blind, a painful disease John - A really great written poem - Luck in the contest - Happy weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :) John Hamilton July 28, 2017 at 3:09 PM Thanks Anne Lise

Heidi Sands July 28, 2017 at 12:58 PM Wow John. You have really shown what it can be like. I agree with Jan. Very powerful. I hope it does well in the contest :) John Hamilton July 28, 2017 at 1:06 PM Thanks Heidi, I appreciate your positive comment, sonnets or any structured poetry is so hard for me, but once in a while I discipline my mind and force it to produce something other than lyrics, glad you enjoyed it! Let's see if Constance shares your enthusiasm.

Jan Allison July 28, 2017 at 11:53 AM Such a powerfully penned sonnet John your vivid imagery depicts an incredibly stormy relationship. Good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx John Hamilton July 28, 2017 at 1:03 PM Thanks Jan, this one took so long, that's why I rarely do sonnets, it's too much like work, hope Constance likes it!