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Stoic Silence Serves

Stoic Silence Serves The silent stoic stands mumbling ice crusted mantra “my light must never fail”. Riddled by the sting of stony hail blanched white by salty spray peering into the maelstrom’s eye un-blinking in the excoriating gale knowing its duty is to serve those in need – at their worst. A silent storm’s “eye” mocks the stoics steadfast stance unable to comprehend such light retreats again to fleeting fury howls at the penetrating beam exposing the peace within its core. ©7/18/2017 submitted to – Lighthouse – Poetry Contest

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/1/2017 12:21:00 AM

I really love the subdued power and strength portrayed by the lighthouse... "the stoics steadfast stance" your last line is classic! Bravo John! Congratulations on your awesome placement! : )

Agnes Krampe

Date: 7/31/2017 12:58:00 PM

Great poem, John - congrats on your top win.

Dean Wood

Date: 7/31/2017 10:00:00 AM

A power write John; full strong words. Congratulations on your win. - Dean

Jan Allison

Date: 7/30/2017 7:00:00 PM

I really enjoyed the imagery and alliteration John:-) many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 7/29/2017 12:07:00 PM

Terrific write John, congratulations...

Eve Roper

Date: 7/29/2017 10:14:00 AM

John, thank you for entering the contest, you captured the feeling that I was looking for. A beautiful piece of art, congratulations on your win! :) ~*

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/29/2017 7:14:00 AM

Second verse is my favorite! Congrats John!

John Michaels

Date: 7/29/2017 5:04:00 AM

Excellent piece, John. Lovely imagery and great alliteration... you can almost feel the frustration of the storm as its efforts are thwarted! And... "excoriating" = a great word! Congrats on your First Place win! Regards, John.

Ralph Sergi

Date: 7/20/2017 6:52:00 PM

Great Poem, John: I wish you well in the contest.

Dean Wood

Date: 7/19/2017 1:02:00 PM

Wonderful imagery John! I have been struggling with this contest. You nailed it! - Dean

John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2017 7:42:00 AM

thanks Dean, and good luck with your struggle

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/19/2017 9:27:00 AM

Wow John! Great images in this poem. A little different than your normal work. I love it!

John Lawless
Date: 7/20/2017 7:42:00 AM

Dammit, Daniel, "normal" has very seldom been used to describe me or my "work". This was a tough one as I was not totally sure what the "theme" was in search of.

Chris Green

Date: 7/18/2017 5:38:00 PM

What a fantastic and descriptive and creatively written poem that had me reading it more than once. This is so cool...best wishes in the contest.

John Lawless
Date: 7/19/2017 6:07:00 AM

Thanks Chris, it gladdens my heart that you had to read it more than once......I love it when a poem hooks me like that.

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 7/18/2017 5:33:00 PM

You can feel that fierceness, that resolve!

John Lawless
Date: 7/19/2017 6:05:00 AM

Well, we were often told ..."Just rub some dirt on it and get back in the game." Thanks for stopping to read and comment

Tim Smith

Date: 7/18/2017 4:48:00 PM

Excellent poem John...great use of alliteration and imagery

John Lawless
Date: 7/19/2017 6:03:00 AM

Thanks Tim, hope your summer is going well

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 7/18/2017 4:44:00 PM

In light of the contest this makes perfect sense. Very well done. Authoritatively spoken.

John Lawless
Date: 7/19/2017 6:02:00 AM

Dale, I hope the contest sponsor feels the same. Thanks for stopping to read and comment